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Topic: DOWN!!!!!!!
johnboy072472 Joined Fri 12/28/07 Posts: 4874	Wed 07/16/08 04:30 PM
DOWN!!!!!!! Well... HERE WE GO AGIAN!!!!!! Another day, Another person in my way..... Thinking your better, Making me bitter.... Defying, Trying, To castrate my well being..... By your lieing and decieving.... But, let me tell you.... What.... IS THE REAL TRUTH!!!!!!! You cant.... Bring me......... DOWN!!!! Dont try it, I'll defy it, Hit you like a riot!!!!!!!.......DOWN!!!!!! Cant take me.....DOWN!!! Cant break me....DOWN!!! Look at you..... You think your better, Your sooooo special..... Whats a matter??? Cause im not phased by you.... Your getting madder????? You cant.... Bring me......... DOWN!!!! Dont try it, I'll defy it, Hit you like a riot!!!!!!!.......DOWN!!!!!! Cant take me.....DOWN!!! Cant break me....DOWN!!! Your words are worthless, Your opinion is nothing.... You are empty.... Your only hunting.... For someone to belittle.... To make yourself feel superior.... When in reality.... Your the one who is inferior..... You cant.... Bring me......... DOWN!!!! Dont try it, I'll defy it, Hit you like a riot!!!!!!!.......DOWN!!!!!! Cant take me.....DOWN!!! Cant break me....DOWN!!! Go away... Leave me be.... I've got a life to live.... All I need is me.... OPINIONS ARE LIKE A$$HOLES......... IN THIS WORLD.......... THERE ARE ALOT OF BOTH....... BE TRUE TO YOURSELF..... FORGET EVERYONE ELSE.... AND MAKE YOUR LIFE THE MOST........ You cant.... Bring me......... DOWN!!!! Dont try it, I'll defy it, Hit you like a riot!!!!!!!.......DOWN!!!!!! Cant take me.....DOWN!!! Cant break me....DOWN!!! JB 2008

Megan_Smiles Joined Tue 04/08/08 Posts: 526	Wed 07/16/08 04:33 PM
I love it That was probably the most inspiring peice I've read in a long while. Bravo!

writteninstone Joined Sat 06/28/08 Posts: 95	Wed 07/16/08 04:35 PM
I wake up with that attitude, and about thirty more during the day - I see too much, but if you didn't see what brings you down maybe it wouldn't be so hard. Often how blessed I would be if I didn't see the darkness of my life trying to bring me DOWN. Nice write... and true. Keep true to yourself... and the mirror looks a lot better. TAB

Funguy69 Joined Wed 07/02/08 Posts: 2	Wed 07/16/08 04:37 PM
Buddy, your angry. If this person cann't make you angry or get to you then you wouln't have to shout out. Peace. You need a drink man, chill!

BrooklineBaby Joined Sun 04/27/08 Posts: 469	Wed 07/16/08 04:37 PM
WOW - that was absolutely fantastic!!! Kudos....

ElaineSeekingJerry Joined Thu 05/01/08 Posts: 978	Wed 07/16/08 04:40 PM
Is there music to go with those lyrics? Cuz that'd be cool

FaithfulOne78 Joined Mon 11/19/07 Posts: 15313	Wed 07/16/08 04:42 PM
Very good sweets! I like it alot!! Well done!!

bastet126 Joined Fri 12/07/07 Posts: 15553	Wed 07/16/08 04:51 PM
Buddy, your angry. If this person cann't make you angry or get to you then you wouln't have to shout out. Peace. You need a drink man, chill! this is true jb, i hope you find some peace soon, you deserve it!

MsTeddyBear2u Joined Fri 04/06/07 Posts: 22031	Wed 07/16/08 04:52 PM


johnboy072472 Joined Fri 12/28/07 Posts: 4874	Wed 07/16/08 05:04 PM
Is there music to go with those lyrics? Cuz that'd be cool Just in my head.......

pkh Joined Sat 05/26/07 Posts: 14961	Wed 07/16/08 05:43 PM
great write something I should try

ElaineSeekingJerry Joined Thu 05/01/08 Posts: 978	Wed 07/16/08 08:39 PM
Is there music to go with those lyrics? Cuz that'd be cool Just in my head....... Just seemed like something I could see myself blasting as I zoomed down the highway when I'm having one of those AGGGGHHHHHHHHHHHHH! days and need some shiny, fast, black car & heavy music therapy to clear my head (and since I have zero talent to write music or lyrics, I'm counting on those of you with the know-how to fill that void! )

Biniecki Joined Sun 05/04/08 Posts: 12	Wed 07/16/08 08:42 PM
I agree with Elaine I think it would make a good song. I could picture a band like slipknot or mudvayne rocking a song like that

johnboy072472 Joined Fri 12/28/07 Posts: 4874	Wed 07/16/08 08:42 PM
Is there music to go with those lyrics? Cuz that'd be cool Just in my head....... Just seemed like something I could see myself blasting as I zoomed down the highway when I'm having one of those AGGGGHHHHHHHHHHHHH! days and need some shiny, fast, black car & heavy music therapy to clear my head (and since I have zero talent to write music or lyrics, I'm counting on those of you with the know-how to fill that void! ) POEMS ARE WORDS, GROUPED BY THE SOUL.... INDIVIDUAL THEY ARE NOTHING, BUT TOGETHER THEY ARE WHOLE....

No1sLove Joined Wed 04/16/08 Posts: 10342	Wed 07/16/08 08:45 PM
Tell em all!

ElaineSeekingJerry Joined Thu 05/01/08 Posts: 978	Wed 07/16/08 08:56 PM
Is there music to go with those lyrics? Cuz that'd be cool Just in my head....... Just seemed like something I could see myself blasting as I zoomed down the highway when I'm having one of those AGGGGHHHHHHHHHHHHH! days and need some shiny, fast, black car & heavy music therapy to clear my head (and since I have zero talent to write music or lyrics, I'm counting on those of you with the know-how to fill that void! ) POEMS ARE WORDS, GROUPED BY THE SOUL.... INDIVIDUAL THEY ARE NOTHING, BUT TOGETHER THEY ARE WHOLE.... I think I'll keep lurking and learning ... and perhaps one day I'll be brave enough to make the attempt myself. I love the power of the written word and have huge admiration and appreciation for people who can assemble it in such a way as to make it come alive and touch peoples' souls.