Topic: A poem for the girl I "like" | |
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The time that passes is nothing compared to the pain I feel. I would do anything for the smile that crosses your face time and time again. The distance between us is nothing more than the journey down a road less traveled. Don't wanna die alone, so I think of you before getting ready for the new beginning that is soon to come. If beauty is measured by stones, then you tip the scale. Silence of the stars that is misunderstood reigns down their hold on you. Humankind moves on but I'm in a state of stasis for you.
I'm not really a poem writer. Tell me what u think... |
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i think she's a lucky girl
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i think she's a lucky girl I just want to thank JSH for allowing me to meet her since I never would have otherwise... |
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I like it
straight fore ward and to the point Thanks for sharing it takes a lot to share things such as this with so many unknown people |
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yeah...lucky girl...thanks for sharing
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i think she's a lucky girl the luckiest. |
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the luckiest. Im glad you liked it <3 |
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Im glad you liked it <3 thank you. haha. |
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It's a really deep poem.Chivalry isn't dead after all.
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It's a really deep poem.Chivalry isn't dead after all. Sad as it is to say, I think there are still guys out there who believe in chivalry like I do, but we must be a dying breed. |
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i didn't like your poem.. it actually should be taken off this site.. ? doesn't everyone agree
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i didn't like your poem.. it actually should be taken off this site.. ? doesn't everyone agree you are a dumb a$$ |
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i didn't like your poem.. it actually should be taken off this site.. ? doesn't everyone agree guess that poem was wrote for his GF lol, dont be a dik bro, ill write a special poem for ya if it will make u feel better. btw, nice stuff man |
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Nice poem...
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Edited by
xander29
on
Thu 12/13/07 04:21 PM
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Thanks for the feedback.
Simplecharles, I said on the first post I'm not much or a writer, in fact this is only like the 5th poem I've written in my life, but to say it should be removed is a little harsh. A little depth to the poem: this poem is about a girl I like and dealing with a long distance relationship added on to the difficulties of me entering the marines rather soon for 4 years of active duty to pay for my college. Hope that helped people understand it a little more. |
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very nice and some lucky girl she is
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very nice,,, I wish you much happiness
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