Topic: A poem for the girl I "like"
xander29's photo
Tue 12/11/07 04:33 PM
The time that passes is nothing compared to the pain I feel. I would do anything for the smile that crosses your face time and time again. The distance between us is nothing more than the journey down a road less traveled. Don't wanna die alone, so I think of you before getting ready for the new beginning that is soon to come. If beauty is measured by stones, then you tip the scale. Silence of the stars that is misunderstood reigns down their hold on you. Humankind moves on but I'm in a state of stasis for you.

I'm not really a poem writer. Tell me what u think...

bgeorge's photo
Tue 12/11/07 04:36 PM
i think she's a lucky girlflowerforyou

xander29's photo
Tue 12/11/07 04:37 PM

i think she's a lucky girlflowerforyou


I just want to thank JSH for allowing me to meet her since I never would have otherwise...

no photo
Tue 12/11/07 04:37 PM
I like it
straight fore ward and to the point
drinker
Thanks for sharing it takes a lot to share things such as this with so many unknown peopledrinker

ArtGurl's photo
Tue 12/11/07 04:38 PM
yeah...lucky girl...thanks for sharing flowerforyou

katrina_4888's photo
Tue 12/11/07 04:41 PM

i think she's a lucky girlflowerforyou

the luckiest. blushing

xander29's photo
Tue 12/11/07 04:43 PM

the luckiest. blushing


flowerforyou Im glad you liked it <3

katrina_4888's photo
Tue 12/11/07 04:46 PM

flowerforyou Im glad you liked it <3

thank you. love haha. :smile:

Starrz's photo
Tue 12/11/07 04:52 PM
It's a really deep poem.Chivalry isn't dead after all.:smile:

xander29's photo
Tue 12/11/07 04:54 PM

It's a really deep poem.Chivalry isn't dead after all.:smile:


Sad as it is to say, I think there are still guys out there who believe in chivalry like I do, but we must be a dying breed. frown

simplecharles's photo
Thu 12/13/07 12:54 PM
i didn't like your poem.. it actually should be taken off this site.. ? doesn't everyone agree

someguy1313's photo
Thu 12/13/07 12:55 PM

i didn't like your poem.. it actually should be taken off this site.. ? doesn't everyone agree



you are a dumb a$$

stunt_614's photo
Thu 12/13/07 01:20 PM

i didn't like your poem.. it actually should be taken off this site.. ? doesn't everyone agree


guess that poem was wrote for his GF lol, dont be a dik bro, ill write a special poem for ya if it will make u feel better.

btw, nice stuff man

MsTeddyBear2u's photo
Thu 12/13/07 04:17 PM
Nice poem... flowerforyou

xander29's photo
Thu 12/13/07 04:19 PM
Edited by xander29 on Thu 12/13/07 04:21 PM
Thanks for the feedback.

Simplecharles, I said on the first post I'm not much or a writer, in fact this is only like the 5th poem I've written in my life, but to say it should be removed is a little harsh.

A little depth to the poem: this poem is about a girl I like and dealing with a long distance relationship added on to the difficulties of me entering the marines rather soon for 4 years of active duty to pay for my college. Hope that helped people understand it a little more.

TxsGal3333's photo
Thu 12/13/07 04:49 PM
very nice and some lucky girl she isbigsmile

LAMom's photo
Thu 12/13/07 07:39 PM
very nice,,, I wish you much happiness flowerforyou