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"The Story Begins Here" is a collaborative story exploring the emotional impact of online relationships. Steve and I have made this sister thread for the readers to drop comments, to keep the continuity of the story. Thank you for reading our both threads. We hope you all enjoy our story. Have a good day. :)

The Story Begins Here

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what doesn't work? you meant this link? https://mingle2.com/topic/578995?page=1

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What is your question? :)

Story so far, sounds like an old bachelor, a pastor hinting at marriage to a young beauty, a widow, laden with a 3 year old child.

On what grounds do I say this? Because the story begins with: “Goodnight, sleep well!” followed by 150 words of soliloquy and self examination.

Why do I say 'a widow'? Because in her 150 words she cheats herself by saying: "However, they were not looking, so everything went smoothly".

Should I continue .., about the 3 year old child?

Sounds like the two of you have the beautiful makings of a LDR... best of luck to you and wishes for success!

I'm still a young man I'm slowly turning against that tide ripening... I have found a writers gift is not just his five senses... It's his heart and it's some kinda angelic inspiration... I have truly only found the only fan you truly need... Is yourself.

I got lost on the content... otherwise beautiful heartfelt words were displayed. The main theme of the story is about the struggles of love online... but what's the difference between meeting someone in a café or someone from another country? As long as they are willing to come and sit by your start talking to you open up a conversation by the chair next to you or across your screen... It doesn't matter people are just afraid to talk anymore. I saw a show that spoke volumes that it used to be a punishment if you weren't allowed to go outside. And now kids will just gladly use the computer to talk to their friend if grounded...

What we need is communication, because I once told a girl from afar that in every town there is a you and there is a me... we're all the same wherever we go sometimes even similar faces ;). 16 years old I wrote that little gem and passed English 11 only by creative means to get the grade. What took the class 2 weeks to think of something I got the highest grade and best of show using one magazine and 30 minutes of actual work.

I think the only thing we can truly decide for ourselves is... If we find love period... Is that not enough? Love isn't always about open touch just what touches your soul. You might say I've loved women form afar than local girlfriends... and it's true. I got caught up in their words and promises where as the girl next door just wanted some food.

It was great reading your essay, Final; some gems I highlighted.

For some reason my heart fell as I read the last line. I think it takes great courage for a girl to ask a certain man for food ('literal food'); even in India. I saw the food; I didn't see her 'trust'.

You mean in a different context; and i suppose I'm to understand that. Still it triggered a recall from a past; and an ache.

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At the end of day, your write includes the reader into the conversation. That my friend, is not just talent; it's state of mind!

This state of mind... It isn't that I'm considered deluded or problematic at all?... People form opinions of anything. Things the angels are showing us... I've seen who I've wanted all along my whole journey as a man. And they kept showing me bumping into her at a gas station. Medical science doesn't back this claim of "fact".

My best friend does not like the subjects I talk about all my books are deep and genres he's interested in... He still is not a fan of mine. And she isn't either she'll just accept me for me.

Ty, jaish

What books are you talking about?

Hi Steve,
If you guys can cut down the red tape, we are curious about the cruise.

Are you on it?

Normal T&C that applies:
Man buys the tickets?
Woman pays for the food.

So if man is disappointed, he has the food.

I'm an author... Some on this site even know this.