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Topic: FOR ALL......
someguy1313's photo
Thu 11/29/07 12:26 PM
Edited by someguy1313 on Thu 11/29/07 12:48 PM
FOR ALL THE UPS,
FOR ALL THE DOWNS.
FOR ALL THE SMILES,
FOR ALL THE FROWNS.

FOR EVERY HUG,
FOR EVERY KISS.
FOR EVERY TOUCH,
YOU'RE GONNA MISS.

FOR EVERY TIME,
YOU WEREN'T THERE.
FOR ALL THE TIMES,
YOU DIDN'T CARE.

FOR ALL THE TIME,
I STOOD BY YOU.
FOR ALL THE TIMES,
YOU MADE ME BLUE.

FOR ALL THE TIMES,
I OPENED MY ARMS
TO SHIELD YOU FROM THE WORLD,
AND ALL ITS HARMS.

FOR EVERY TIME,
YOU MADE ME CRY.
I DESERVE BETTER,
F$ck You. . .
GOOD-BYE.

An Eternal Sadness::::::::::::

coco56's photo
Thu 11/29/07 12:27 PM
flowerforyou

jewels126's photo
Thu 11/29/07 12:30 PM
love i love this wish i would of came up with this one for the player that played me for so long

someguy1313's photo
Thu 11/29/07 12:33 PM
thanksflowerforyou drinker

Noden's photo
Thu 11/29/07 12:35 PM
awwwwh, so sad to see a broken heart

neveragain's photo
Thu 11/29/07 12:44 PM
love it as alwaysflowerforyou

MsTeddyBear2u's photo
Thu 11/29/07 12:46 PM
flowerforyou

Scorpio8569's photo
Thu 11/29/07 12:46 PM
This is great, but I could give you some advice to help keep the rythm a little better, if you like.

Stockdog6's photo
Thu 11/29/07 12:47 PM
everybody is writng these poems..what gives...let me give it a try

There once was a man from nantucket...

no photo
Thu 11/29/07 12:48 PM
Dang, don't you wish you get enough time to say it before they leave instead of writing it later....hmmm...you should print that out and mail it to her.laugh

TxsGal3333's photo
Thu 11/29/07 12:48 PM
Very good I liked it and can relate to it as well.

someguy1313's photo
Thu 11/29/07 12:49 PM

Dang, don't you wish you get enough time to say it before they leave instead of writing it later....hmmm...you should print that out and mail it to her.laugh



nah... I'm not that mean.

someguy1313's photo
Thu 11/29/07 12:50 PM

This is great, but I could give you some advice to help keep the rythm a little better, if you like.


um... nonoway

neveragain's photo
Thu 11/29/07 12:51 PM

This is great, but I could give you some advice to help keep the rythm a little better, if you like.



are you kidding... the rythm is great

Scorpio8569's photo
Thu 11/29/07 12:52 PM
Sorry, I meant rhythm, or pace, the rhyming is excellent.

neveragain's photo
Thu 11/29/07 12:56 PM

Sorry, I meant rhythm, or pace, the rhyming is excellent.


still think your nuts... pace is good to someguy

no photo
Thu 11/29/07 12:58 PM
i think it depends on who's reading it....ppl read differently...print is hard to take sometimes...the person reading's mood usually plays a big factor on the perception of the peice too...although this one was pretty straight forward...

Scorpio8569's photo
Thu 11/29/07 01:00 PM
LOL, I still think I'm nuts too, but the poem it still fine, everybody writes different, I just write several differnt ways, and in several different styles, drinker drinker drinker

someguy1313's photo
Thu 11/29/07 01:02 PM

i think it depends on who's reading it....ppl read differently...print is hard to take sometimes...the person reading's mood usually plays a big factor on the perception of the peice too...although this one was pretty straight forward...



yep!

no photo
Thu 11/29/07 01:04 PM

LOL, I still think I'm nuts too, but the poem it still fine, everybody writes different, I just write several differnt ways, and in several different styles, drinker drinker drinker


i know what you mean, i've played with a few different styles, but mainly i just write how i think...not even sure if there is a style to it...lol

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