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Edited by
someguy1313
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Thu 11/29/07 12:48 PM
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FOR ALL THE UPS,
FOR ALL THE DOWNS. FOR ALL THE SMILES, FOR ALL THE FROWNS. FOR EVERY HUG, FOR EVERY KISS. FOR EVERY TOUCH, YOU'RE GONNA MISS. FOR EVERY TIME, YOU WEREN'T THERE. FOR ALL THE TIMES, YOU DIDN'T CARE. FOR ALL THE TIME, I STOOD BY YOU. FOR ALL THE TIMES, YOU MADE ME BLUE. FOR ALL THE TIMES, I OPENED MY ARMS TO SHIELD YOU FROM THE WORLD, AND ALL ITS HARMS. FOR EVERY TIME, YOU MADE ME CRY. I DESERVE BETTER, F$ck You. . . GOOD-BYE. An Eternal Sadness:::::::::::: |
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i love this wish i would of came up with this one for the player that played me for so long
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thanks
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awwwwh, so sad to see a broken heart
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love it as always
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This is great, but I could give you some advice to help keep the rythm a little better, if you like.
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everybody is writng these poems..what gives...let me give it a try
There once was a man from nantucket... |
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Dang, don't you wish you get enough time to say it before they leave instead of writing it later....hmmm...you should print that out and mail it to her.
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Very good I liked it and can relate to it as well.
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Dang, don't you wish you get enough time to say it before they leave instead of writing it later....hmmm...you should print that out and mail it to her. nah... I'm not that mean. |
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This is great, but I could give you some advice to help keep the rythm a little better, if you like. um... no |
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This is great, but I could give you some advice to help keep the rythm a little better, if you like. are you kidding... the rythm is great |
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Sorry, I meant rhythm, or pace, the rhyming is excellent.
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Sorry, I meant rhythm, or pace, the rhyming is excellent. still think your nuts... pace is good to someguy |
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i think it depends on who's reading it....ppl read differently...print is hard to take sometimes...the person reading's mood usually plays a big factor on the perception of the peice too...although this one was pretty straight forward...
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LOL, I still think I'm nuts too, but the poem it still fine, everybody writes different, I just write several differnt ways, and in several different styles,
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i think it depends on who's reading it....ppl read differently...print is hard to take sometimes...the person reading's mood usually plays a big factor on the perception of the peice too...although this one was pretty straight forward... yep! |
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LOL, I still think I'm nuts too, but the poem it still fine, everybody writes different, I just write several differnt ways, and in several different styles, i know what you mean, i've played with a few different styles, but mainly i just write how i think...not even sure if there is a style to it...lol |
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