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Edited by
Cascadex
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Sat 02/02/13 09:14 AM
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The peaceful autumn breeze,
Barely noticed… Weaves, between the unsuspecting leaves: An artful assassin, Creating a masterpiece. Its victims, drifting calmly Bright and vibrant. Rebelling, against their inevitable end: The hope inside them, Pulsating Blood into their veins. u s e l e s s As the grass opens its arms, Accepting. Whispering, the final words of wisdom. The only one, who notices, Who cares? As they wither slowly, It reminds me of a pain. Only momentarily forgotten. Each fallen leaf, A tiny piece of us. And inside… Somewhere, A wish. That smoldering inside our souls, Is a power so great: They could merge together forever. And baby, it will happen, I promise. In the peaceful autumn, When the crimson leaves blow… …Back on to their withered branches. |
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Hopes and dreams lay inside each one of us, and your poem portrays this beautifully, with a beginning, a middle trail of thoughts, a wanting to hold onto, and an end.
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I can definitely feel the message and power in this one... sooooo awesome...
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Love the imagery Cas. And your format makes the write even more outstanding.
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Morning young blood! When did you write this one?...It is very good, like PurpleRoses said, complete, full bodied...You're a good writer Cas!, TY for sharing
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Awesome writing... loved it!
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Edited by
Up2Us
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Wed 02/06/13 09:09 AM
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