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Topic: You rocked my world...
AthenaRose2 Joined Fri 11/09/12 Posts: 6972	Fri 02/01/13 12:44 AM
what we did is not what we do I’m moving on getting over you where we connected I’m clueless to see but you rocked my world getting the best of me gripped in your intensity you made me so weak I couldn’t resist you knocking me off of my feet you made me so hot my skin burned for days felt like I was helpless lost in a your haze coming on so strong you thru me for a loop and you still try to hang on tho I want nothing more to do with you!!! I want you out of my head my mind stays confused my body resents you and I do too!!! this just can’t go on don’t you get the clue man, aren’t you listening I hate having the flu!!! AR©02/01/13

Cascadex Joined Thu 01/31/13 Posts: 20	Fri 02/01/13 07:54 AM
that's a beautiful twist at the end love it

Sojourning_Soul Joined Fri 02/13/09 Posts: 10767	Fri 02/01/13 08:32 AM
Confusion brings clarity For you illness I wish you a speedy recovery

Solace84 Joined Mon 04/30/12 Posts: 322	Fri 02/01/13 12:22 PM
Not through with him, cos your mind has not decided yet........ Nice write!

Teditis Joined Sun 03/07/10 Posts: 3597	Fri 02/01/13 12:27 PM
Nice write... thnx for sharing your human frailties. (Can't help thinking that Solace has a good point. )

oldhippie1952 Joined Mon 03/14/11 Posts: 22693	Fri 02/01/13 12:29 PM


AthenaRose2 Joined Fri 11/09/12 Posts: 6972	Fri 02/01/13 02:40 PM
that's a beautiful twist at the end love it thanks, Cascadex, I'm glad you got it.. this isn't my normal style of work, so I'm happy I was able to pull it off..

AthenaRose2 Joined Fri 11/09/12 Posts: 6972	Fri 02/01/13 02:42 PM
Confusion brings clarity For you illness I wish you a speedy recovery I'm sorry, Soul, I have to confess this started out as another break up piece, then I decided I needed a laugh instead. I'm fine, no flu.. just a silly spin on my heart again.. thank you for reading and wishing me well, you are very kind...

AthenaRose2 Joined Fri 11/09/12 Posts: 6972	Fri 02/01/13 02:44 PM
Not through with him, cos your mind has not decided yet........ Nice write! Oh my, I see I can't get anything over on you though, Solace... you know me too well already...

KiK2me Joined Sun 01/06/13 Posts: 8732	Fri 02/01/13 02:46 PM
I always enjoy your writing Ms Athena And i'm sorry you are sick ? Hope you feel better soon... KiK

AthenaRose2 Joined Fri 11/09/12 Posts: 6972	Fri 02/01/13 02:48 PM
Nice write... thnx for sharing your human frailties. (Can't help thinking that Solace has a good point. ) Yes, Solace seems to know my heart better than I do... he must have been doing some reading up on me.. lol... and yes, Teditis, unfortunately I do have some frailties, but I do my best to hide them as much as possible.. or at least I think that's what I'm doing... jeezz.. anyway.. thank you for reading this piece too, and for your words...

AthenaRose2 Joined Fri 11/09/12 Posts: 6972	Fri 02/01/13 02:49 PM
Hippie.. my friend.. once again.. my 2 thumbs up letting me know you enjoyed it too.. thank you..

AthenaRose2 Joined Fri 11/09/12 Posts: 6972	Fri 02/01/13 02:53 PM
I always enjoy your writing Ms Athena And i'm sorry you are sick ? Hope you feel better soon... KiK KiK, hi... thank you for reading and enjoying my work.. and thank you for your concern, but I'm not sick.. I was trying to be clever with this piece, and it mislead some but not others..

threepurpleroses Joined Sun 01/13/13 Posts: 73	Fri 02/01/13 06:46 PM
Great play on words, leading the reader to believe that it is something else, then whammy! The flu!Great ending!

AthenaRose2 Joined Fri 11/09/12 Posts: 6972	Sat 02/02/13 12:53 AM
Great play on words, leading the reader to believe that it is something else, then whammy! The flu!Great ending! Thanks, Roses, I'm glad you enjoyed this too..