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Sandwiched in between
The pain and the regret Is a string of fleeting memories, Well-worn but not well-spent The world keeps on spinning, But it doesn't seem to move The gambler keeps on gambling, But he cannot win or lose Malevolent reality Waits idly by the door The stark unchanging nothingness Persists forevermore There isn't any remedy For this specific curse But the unconsoling concept That it can't get any worse.... |
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Very nice
struck a.chord |
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Thank you!
Just one of "those days," ya know....? |
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Stuck?
I will say I admire you're optimism As in "it can't be any worse" Made me smile for the first time today. Thank you |
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Stuck? I will say I admire you're optimism As in "it can't be any worse" Made me smile for the first time today. Thank you You're most welcome. I'm not really comfortable with poetry, so it's nice to know that someone got something out of this....! |
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Your lines always... "hit" really well. Terrific endings which tie together your concept(s).
"Well-worn but not well-spent" My favorite line. I always enjoy when you post some poetry. |
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Edited by
jemare
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Sun 04/08/12 09:06 PM
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Lex, you might not feel comfortable with poetry, but it really does suit you well. As you get more comfortable, you might even find it makes you just, well.... feel better once the words are out of your head and onto the paper(or screen, as the case might be)
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I've had those days too Lex .
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((((((SexyLexy)))))
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Your lines always... "hit" really well. Terrific endings which tie together your concept(s). "Well-worn but not well-spent" My favorite line. I always enjoy when you post some poetry. Thank you! The thing I struggle with is that I can generally come up with two or three lines that really work for me, but the rest just seems like so much window dressing. But I suppose it's the same with the books, in the end. After the fact, I can go back and read something I wrote -- and I'll think "I really like this paragraph!" but then, "This other one doesn't flow as well as it should." Some parts are better than others. Poetry (to my way of thinking, anyway) incorporates some peripheral restrictions that prose doesn't have to worry about. So it's more of a "challenge," in some ways, and I'm not really as sure of myself within the poetic format. |
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Quite liked it :-)
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When one can get past their fear
And write/speak from the core It all makes sense I humbly suggest you "stay in the moment" when writing poetry And never, EVER reread |
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Lex, you might not feel comfortable with poetry, but it really does suit you well. As you get more comfortable, you might even find it makes you just, well.... feel better once the words are out of your head and onto the paper(or screen, as the case might be) That's true, sometimes it actually does feel good to get it all out.... Other times, it's just more confusing....! |
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I've had those days too Lex . It makes you think, doesn't it? Like: "I wonder what I'd have to do to not have any more days like this one....." And is there really an answer? |
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Edited by
Peekinin
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Mon 04/09/12 03:47 PM
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I've had those days too Lex . It makes you think, doesn't it? Like: "I wonder what I'd have to do to not have any more days like this one....." And is there really an answer? But of course there's an answer! It's inside of you I view melancholy thoughts of which you speak As a transition to something better A realization that its not "good enough" and I am about to find it can't get any worse |
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((((((SexyLexy))))) Hey, I haven't seen that pic before! What are you smoking? |
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Quite liked it :-) Thank you, maybe you can explain it to me sometime! (I'm lost....) |
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((((((SexyLexy))))) Hey, I haven't seen that pic before! What are you smoking? only a ciggy...((((((SexyLexy))))))..I do not contaminate my body with anything else |
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...very heartfelt Lex
and you do quite well with poetry! |
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When one can get past their fear And write/speak from the core It all makes sense I humbly suggest you "stay in the moment" when writing poetry And never, EVER reread I agree, staying in the moment is crucial when writing.... But I do have a tendency to go back and reread things -- and it turns out that "I can't believe I actually wrote that" can be good AND bad at times....! |
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