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Topic: Unchanging
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Sun 04/08/12 10:40 AM
Sandwiched in between
The pain and the regret
Is a string of fleeting memories,
Well-worn but not well-spent
The world keeps on spinning,
But it doesn't seem to move
The gambler keeps on gambling,
But he cannot win or lose

Malevolent reality
Waits idly by the door
The stark unchanging nothingness
Persists forevermore
There isn't any remedy
For this specific curse
But the unconsoling concept
That it can't get any worse....



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Sun 04/08/12 03:36 PM
Very niceflowerforyou

struck a.chordohwell

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Sun 04/08/12 04:58 PM
Thank you!

Just one of "those days," ya know....?

shades

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Sun 04/08/12 05:49 PM
Stuck?

I will say I admire you're optimism

As in "it can't be any worse"

Made me smile for the first time today.

Thank you

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Sun 04/08/12 06:28 PM

Stuck?

I will say I admire you're optimism

As in "it can't be any worse"

Made me smile for the first time today.

Thank you


You're most welcome.

I'm not really comfortable with poetry, so it's nice to know that someone got something out of this....!


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Sun 04/08/12 08:39 PM
Your lines always... "hit" really well. Terrific endings which tie together your concept(s).

"Well-worn but not well-spent"

My favorite line.

I always enjoy when you post some poetry.

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Sun 04/08/12 09:04 PM
Edited by jemare on Sun 04/08/12 09:06 PM
Lex, you might not feel comfortable with poetry, but it really does suit you well. As you get more comfortable, you might even find it makes you just, well.... feel better once the words are out of your head and onto the paper(or screen, as the case might be)happy

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Sun 04/08/12 11:46 PM
I've had those days too Lex .

flowerforyou

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Mon 04/09/12 09:48 AM
((((((SexyLexy)))))drinker flowers

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Mon 04/09/12 10:02 AM

Your lines always... "hit" really well. Terrific endings which tie together your concept(s).

"Well-worn but not well-spent"

My favorite line.

I always enjoy when you post some poetry.


Thank you!

The thing I struggle with is that I can generally come up with two or three lines that really work for me, but the rest just seems like so much window dressing.

But I suppose it's the same with the books, in the end. After the fact, I can go back and read something I wrote -- and I'll think "I really like this paragraph!" but then, "This other one doesn't flow as well as it should." Some parts are better than others.

Poetry (to my way of thinking, anyway) incorporates some peripheral restrictions that prose doesn't have to worry about. So it's more of a "challenge," in some ways, and I'm not really as sure of myself within the poetic format.


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Mon 04/09/12 10:12 AM
Quite liked it :-)

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Mon 04/09/12 10:50 AM
When one can get past their fear

And write/speak from the core

It all makes senseflowerforyou

I humbly suggest you "stay in the moment" when writing poetry

And never, EVER rereadlaugh


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Mon 04/09/12 11:37 AM

Lex, you might not feel comfortable with poetry, but it really does suit you well. As you get more comfortable, you might even find it makes you just, well.... feel better once the words are out of your head and onto the paper(or screen, as the case might be)happy


That's true, sometimes it actually does feel good to get it all out....

Other times, it's just more confusing....!


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Mon 04/09/12 03:00 PM

I've had those days too Lex .

flowerforyou


It makes you think, doesn't it?

Like: "I wonder what I'd have to do to not have any more days like this one....."

And is there really an answer?


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Mon 04/09/12 03:37 PM
Edited by Peekinin on Mon 04/09/12 03:47 PM


I've had those days too Lex .

flowerforyou


It makes you think, doesn't it?

Like: "I wonder what I'd have to do to not have any more days like this one....."

And is there really an answer?




But of course there's an answer!flowerforyou

It's inside of you

I view melancholy thoughts of which you speak

As a transition to something better

A realization that its not "good enough"

and I am about to find it can't get any worse:wink: happy

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Mon 04/09/12 03:52 PM

((((((SexyLexy)))))drinker flowers


Hey, I haven't seen that pic before!

What are you smoking?

flowers flowers flowers


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Mon 04/09/12 03:53 PM

Quite liked it :-)


Thank you, maybe you can explain it to me sometime!

(I'm lost....)

shades

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Tue 04/10/12 05:55 AM


((((((SexyLexy)))))drinker flowers


Hey, I haven't seen that pic before!

What are you smoking?

flowers flowers flowers






only a ciggy...((((((SexyLexy))))))..I do not contaminate my body with anything else:smile:

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Tue 04/10/12 12:31 PM
...very heartfelt Lex
and you do quite well with poetry! flowerforyou



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Tue 04/10/12 03:01 PM

When one can get past their fear

And write/speak from the core

It all makes senseflowerforyou

I humbly suggest you "stay in the moment" when writing poetry

And never, EVER rereadlaugh




I agree, staying in the moment is crucial when writing....

But I do have a tendency to go back and reread things -- and it turns out that "I can't believe I actually wrote that" can be good AND bad at times....!


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