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Edited by
Totage
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Sun 02/12/12 09:20 PM
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What's going on in the world today
Everybody getting high looking to find love But you have to be sober to find it Some of us just like to get high But then time passes us by Love sits low to the earth When we soar too high we can't find it Starring into the sun we get blinded Looking for love but we can't find it When life's too hard to taken sober by the time you clean up your life can be over When you find love put nothing above her Hold her close to your heart and hide her under your covers Never hesitate to show her you love her And don't get high Don't love pass you by It can all be lost in the blink of an eye |
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I love the rhythm you have in this. Truly a brilliant poem.
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TY, I have been told that my poems could be written into songs, the way they have a rhythm.
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Edited by
Bravalady
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Sun 02/12/12 10:03 PM
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Totage, you have talent. Rhythm is essential in poetry, but lots of people don't seem to know that. I love this line: "Love sits low to the earth." That's just beautiful.
Actually I like the whole poem. Post more! |
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"When you find love put nothing above her
Hold her close to your heart and hide her under your covers Never hesitate to show her you love her " Awesome Totage..Love that bit up there ^^^^^ |
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I'm glad you guys enjoy it. I will post more, as I'm moved. I do have other poems on here though.
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I'm glad you guys enjoy it. I will post more, as I'm moved. I do have other poems on here though. Hey Totage...I like "love sits low to the earth" too...it is a great line for so many reasons....TY for sharing!! ![]() |
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TY, I changed it slightly at the last minute, I forget what I was going to put originally though, but it was something along the same line.
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Its great to see ya back on the pages man,,and this is a very COOL read,,,and life, love and getting high,,don't blend well in most gals and guys,,,,,Nice to see ya writing and love is all around man..
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TY it is :)
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