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Topic: desire
s1owhand's photo
Mon 07/28/08 10:09 PM
the night noises
quiet
lights dimmed
dishwasher relaxing exhaling steam
spent
refrigerator hum
i think
calmly mixing
louche in absinthe
cloudy droplets of anticipation
illicit
pleasurable
oh yes

luxurious indulgence
soft time
nighttime

all alone

amber caramel thoughts of you
my fingers comb plush ripples
searching for you
there you are

perfect hands find me
and soft full lips wet
slightly nervous
their tremble drives me wild
with recognition
and submission
and more submission
i give in

when resistance
gently yields
then yields again
and soon over heat
the tiniest hint
of last desperate resistance
says no
god no
not this
not yet
too late
resistance
all lost
inside instead
heat
desire

bgeorge's photo
Mon 07/28/08 10:12 PM
wowflowerforyou

anonymous326's photo
Mon 07/28/08 10:27 PM
nice write buddybigsmile

myanimalcracker's photo
Mon 07/28/08 10:42 PM
A-MAZING! (((H))) flowerforyou flowerforyou

s1owhand's photo
Mon 07/28/08 11:45 PM
Edited by s1owhand on Mon 07/28/08 11:46 PM
thank you very much!

bgeorge, anony326, and (((myanimalcracker))) :heart:

RhettBBadBoy's photo
Mon 07/28/08 11:48 PM
I encourage you to keep writing, but I don't personally like your stuff. Good poetry to me is real concrete and then creates emotion by suggesting or titilating the reader's perceptions.

Good luck despite my criticisms.

Bob

RhettBBadBoy's photo
Mon 07/28/08 11:48 PM
I encourage you to keep writing, but I don't personally like your stuff. Good poetry to me is real concrete and then creates emotion by suggesting or titilating the reader's perceptions.

Good luck despite my criticisms.

Bob

s1owhand's photo
Mon 07/28/08 11:52 PM
not at all. it's purely a personal thing!
thanks for reading and stopping by!

no photo
Tue 07/29/08 06:28 AM
Edited by MsWizard on Tue 07/29/08 06:30 AM

I encourage you to keep writing, but I don't personally like your stuff. Good poetry to me is real concrete and then creates emotion by suggesting or titilating the reader's perceptions.

Good luck despite my criticisms.

Bob


Good poetry is that which can move one person's soul one word at a time. I've read your "haiku" and have been left unmoved. slowhand's poetry moves me every time I read it. I guess this is a case of one man's poison is another man's nectar? Or beauty is in the eye of the beholder?

If you have nothing positive to say beyond what YOUR opinion of what poetry "should" be, why would you even bother?

((((H))))) as usual, this piece moved ME. :heart:

s1owhand's photo
Tue 07/29/08 06:35 AM
well....blushing

Thank you (((A))) :heart:
you know i always enjoy reading your work too. flowerforyou

i thought Bob's Haiku was nice!
everyone has their style and topic
preferences. so i don't mind. it
inspires me to try some different
things too perhaps.

Bob's just joined and just started posting
so i'm sure he'll find lots of other
interesting stuff here and the more the
merrier.

Good Morning to you - I'm just getting
started today.

MsTeddyBear2u's photo
Tue 07/29/08 06:36 AM
:tongue: {{{Slow}}}
Moving here too !!!
flowers drinks

no photo
Tue 07/29/08 06:38 AM
loved itflowers flowers

no photo
Tue 07/29/08 06:41 AM

well....blushing

Thank you (((A))) :heart:
you know i always enjoy reading your work too. flowerforyou

i thought Bob's Haiku was nice!
everyone has their style and topic
preferences. so i don't mind. it
inspires me to try some different
things too perhaps.

Bob's just joined and just started posting
so i'm sure he'll find lots of other
interesting stuff here and the more the
merrier.

Good Morning to you - I'm just getting
started today.


Sweet Henry, I understand all the above. However, why would anybody bother taking the time to post their opinions on what something should be while offering veiled criticisms on the work they are posting on? If I dont like something, I dont bother commenting. Why? Because my opinion is just that. MY opinion. And it doesn't necessarily make it the RIGHT opinion.

Now, get out to that kitchen and rattle dem pots and pants. Wizzie needs a cup of coffee.....grrrrrr....:wink: :heart:

s1owhand's photo
Tue 07/29/08 06:46 AM
flowerforyou :heart: (((MsTeddy))) and (((pkd))) :heart: flowerforyou

s1owhand's photo
Tue 07/29/08 07:05 AM

grrrrrr....:wink: :heart:


bigsmile you know i can't resist Growling bigsmile

:heart::heart:


no photo
Tue 07/29/08 07:07 AM


grrrrrr....:wink: :heart:


bigsmile you know i can't resist Growling bigsmile

:heart::heart:




<<-----was counting on that and now contentedly waiting for her coffee....bigsmile :heart: :heart:

LAMom's photo
Tue 07/29/08 10:21 AM
A Silhouette of Bliss flowerforyou :heart:


d4tc's photo
Tue 07/29/08 11:35 AM
Bravo! bigsmile

S10w has been holding back! laugh

Write More!

AngelLight's photo
Tue 07/29/08 11:45 AM
Very nice H smokin

RhettBBadBoy's photo
Sun 08/03/08 12:08 PM


Isn't it strange that you had nothing positive to contribute on my comment, but suggest that my objective criticism is somehow faulty because it's "negative." Practice what you preach, especially during PMS . . . LOL

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