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Topic: Oh to the poets....
7Kate7's photo
Tue 04/15/08 05:24 PM
Drum beats roll, trumpets sound
Marching onward, shaking the ground
Arrows of syllable, swords of sentences
Shields of sounds and clubs of phrases
Blow darts of alliteration
These are the tools of the poets’ nation
No rules exist in this strange land
Except it must come from heart to hand
Form is second to pure expression
Feel free to break with convention
Our daring makes grammar teachers blood run cold
We are the rebels of the writing world



MirrorMirror's photo
Tue 04/15/08 05:26 PM
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Tue 04/15/08 05:28 PM
Nerd. Nerd! NEEEEEERRRRRD!!!! laugh

(I'm allowed to say that because I'm her roommate and she knows how I mean it. :smile: )

7Kate7's photo
Tue 04/15/08 05:28 PM
Thanks Mirror. Hope the day finds you well:smile:

hikerchick's photo
Tue 04/15/08 05:28 PM
I love it!

"Blow darts of alliteration"!

perfect.

hikerchick's photo
Tue 04/15/08 05:29 PM
BTW I am 7Nora7

jimz's photo
Tue 04/15/08 05:30 PM
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7Kate7's photo
Tue 04/15/08 05:31 PM
Jimz... good to see you
Nora.. thanks!
Glad you guys liked it.

MsTeddyBear2u's photo
Tue 04/15/08 05:33 PM
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Cool!!!

Heres to those grammer teachers... laugh

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Tue 04/15/08 05:33 PM
Speaking of bards....... That was very nice!! flowerforyou

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Tue 04/15/08 05:45 PM
I like this a lot, very nice imagery. And a great flow -- lines like "Arrows of syllable" occur far too infrequently in standard writing. A metaphor after my own heart, so to speak.

The only thing I would change would be to add an apostrophe after "teachers" because it is a possessive.

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s1owhand's photo
Tue 04/15/08 08:06 PM
Lex's comment is perdantic laugh like pedantic for nerds - from the french perdre...

laugh

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Tue 04/15/08 08:13 PM

Lex's comment is perdantic laugh like pedantic for nerds - from the french perdre...

laugh


Hey, I got a book published, I'm allowed to be prodantical.

glasses

s1owhand's photo
Tue 04/15/08 08:19 PM
Edited by s1owhand on Tue 04/15/08 08:23 PM


Lex's comment is perdantic laugh like pedantic for nerds - from the french perdre...

laugh


Hey, I got a book published, I'm allowed to be prodantical.

glasses


they're you go again laugh (with the apostrophy catastrophy)
are you sure it shouldn't be teacher's?

btw Kate I enjoyed it too bigsmile

LAMom's photo
Tue 04/15/08 09:07 PM
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Wonderful



CrazyPalindrome's photo
Tue 04/15/08 09:23 PM
Really well done, I like it a lot.

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Tue 04/15/08 09:37 PM
flowerforyou very origindrinker :heart: al

Abracadabra's photo
Tue 04/15/08 09:59 PM
Edited by Abracadabra on Tue 04/15/08 10:02 PM
I like the blow darts of alliteration too flowerforyou

One of them stuck in me and inspired the following,…

(no tongue twisting now,… read it right! :wink: )

~ Blues Darts of Alliteration ~

S1owhand sings his sultry blues
with hot and horny husky hues
belching burps from bubbly booze
inflicting flings of things infused

Slurring verse with slushy speech
his steaming stogy’s smoke-ring reeks
of alliterated lyrics leeched
from Abra’s aberrant pen

Such sexy songs of sensuous shame
sung by a saucy swooning swain
dancingly dangled for his darling dame
whose kept in check with a candy cane

laugh

That was fun. bigsmile

hikerchick's photo
Tue 04/15/08 10:01 PM
The anti-poet strikes again!

LAMom's photo
Tue 04/15/08 10:01 PM
laugh bigsmile flowerforyou

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