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My favorite place, is in a tree,
I hide there clinging desperately no worries of falling, but of being seen I am silent and still in my land of green I watch them walking, an ebb and flow Oblivious to me, as they go They can't touch this feeling, so serene, In my world of brown and green I start to whistle, unaware, and still no one espies my lair As they go about their ways, no one does look up these days. I climb on down, and with surprise, A girl sees me with widened eyes. I smile at her, but walk on by, and stare serenely at the sky. |
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Nice, watch the capitalization and punctuation though!
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Nice, watch the capitalization and punctuation though! Why? It's poetry.... you're not supposed to worry about either one of those things... *cough*e. e. cummings *cough* |
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Lovely, for the glory of the cult.
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not arguing the fact, but you're supposed to worry about it in all writing
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not arguing the fact, but you're supposed to worry about it in all writing Generally, in poetry, I only punctuate when it feels right to me Mayhaps when i want a pause... or EMPHASIS! the dramatic clause poetry is free to me seprate from heavy essays where capitals roam Free it's just my creativity. |
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not arguing the fact, but you're supposed to worry about it in all writing Also... umm... I'm noticing a lack of captials and punctuation here too. Just write how you feel, and let punctuation fall where it may. |
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Nice poem dear! I remember my hiding in the trees days!
 
*&^%$# the puncuation! 
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Nice poem dear! I remember my hiding in the trees days!
*&^%$# the puncuation!
I'm 20 and I STILL love hiding in trees. I miss my treehouse... |
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Edited by
Peccy
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Thu 02/21/08 11:34 AM
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I am only an ex-editor who has been published a little over 400 times, what do I know...lol. I was saying that the poetry, in my opinion, is good enough to be published if you clean it up a bit. All I was talking about.
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I am only an ex-editor who has been published a little over 400 times, what do I know...lol. I was saying that the poetry, in my opinion, is good enough to be published if you clean it up a bit. All I was talking about. I dunno. It's all personal style I think. I'm too... spazzy to be meticulous about punctuation in poetry... ... There's not much "clean" about hiding in trees either. Also, I keep reading it, and I can't figure out where I'd want to put in other punctuation. I like a freer flow... in fact, I may go back and actually take away some punctuation at the end. |
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I am only an ex-editor who has been published a little over 400 times, what do I know...lol. I was saying that the poetry, in my opinion, is good enough to be published if you clean it up a bit. All I was talking about. I dunno. It's all personal style I think. I'm too... spazzy to be meticulous about punctuation in poetry... ... There's not much "clean" about hiding in trees either. Also, I keep reading it, and I can't figure out where I'd want to put in other punctuation. I like a freer flow... in fact, I may go back and actually take away some punctuation at the end. |
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