Light almost pail complextion with a Sharp Taste of Beauty,
Speak of anything and everything, and bored I never get,
Questions and thought Told more of from you,
Then anyother,
a feel of Ease and passion with a Smile as you read and maybe laugh,
A good night ended with a Smooch as I Cant help but Grin,
So far yet feel so close,
Reading your words and seeing more and more of the beauty seemed to be almost hiden..



I cant think of more to say yet...

I shall sit back and wait for the next chapter,,,
Very Nice

I dont like it...its missing something and doesnt say enough
Im unhappy and disappointed with this write

Emotions brought to light,, feelings of the heart and mind,,, Real and untouched,, Pure in form,,,

I like,,,

Ill Be writing this one over
And hopfully will be much better

I will await your re-write,, I do hope you keep this one in your books,, I did enjoy the write

^^
I will be keeping this one,
but will just make another poem that is a little like it

DeathsTreaty...

Hello! First off, I'd like to say that the imagery in this piece is rather good, and I like where this poem could lead. However, never write a new piece, it just takes a bit of revision, though I'm sure you know that.
No poetry/prose is ever truly finished, everything can always use a bit more work...have faith in this poem, and work on it, oh, I don't know, sometime when maybe you are bored or something, but never force yourself. This seems rather forced.
Oh, and no untouched piece will probably ever be published..well, now it will..*sigh* Standards have lowered so much since the 'beginning' of poetry..

-Lozer

Ouuuuuuuuu Death has some life!!!
Nice write!