Topic: Trail
a4leafclover2u2's photo
Wed 01/30/08 03:00 AM
Sod, wood, dirt, and concrete..
not to mention some cobblestone.
Many trips down a slow street,
looking to an end unknown..

Perilous seeming; the awaiting fate..
for years the blackened view it clouded
out the mind. Following sordid bait
to places in which it crowded.

Jusified by bitter memories,
delving into like pursuits.
Feeling blank, numb extremities
dangling from dirty suits.

To a slient place among the trees,
a pause for the cause(if you will).
Birdwatching aloud(so you please),
Reminiscent o'er the long dead quill.

A lady in waiting..she softly spoke,
though her words were forgetable.
By her actions a dead heart awoke.
The place? A blur..how regretable!

T'would like to see her rewarded,
and surely she has been..
Motives such are never thwarted,
and sadly, rarely seen.


:heart: aleafclover2u2


jimz's photo
Wed 01/30/08 09:18 AM
Oh yeah, from the first line, I'm there. I actually could see and feel the cobblestone. Dude, you have a touch of the ancient muse, showing her the city of your soul.

peace out
jimmy
(a fan)

LAMom's photo
Wed 01/30/08 09:20 AM
Sighhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh I breathe stand up and say,,,
Most awesome,, flowerforyou

TxsGal3333's photo
Wed 01/30/08 09:39 AM
Awesome write how sweet it is to walk that path
and see within.bigsmile

a4leafclover2u2's photo
Wed 01/30/08 06:25 PM
Edited by a4leafclover2u2 on Wed 01/30/08 06:26 PM
Thanx Jim, i'm getting all humbled by the praise..and it's one of my more endearing qualities.

Thanx Denise, she was a poor woman..feeding the birds..and she was the most awesome thing ever to my life.

Thanx Kristi, it took me a long time to get willing to do so though..integrity and beauty are rarely coupled:)
I guess I always thought my insides were ugly, until her..


a4leafclover2u2

kc0003's photo
Thu 01/31/08 09:18 PM
very nice i really like this one

drinker

Fadedspirit's photo
Fri 02/01/08 06:23 AM
Very nice! Nice imagery and feeling.

pkh's photo
Fri 02/01/08 06:37 AM
awesome write