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I was asked if I take request so I guess I asked for this. When I said I would try the subject I was given was to write something about a guy in a wheelchair in a grocery store
This was about 20 min ago so I know this is rough... I tried Stef.................... i come around the corner we come face to face you turn away – everyone does this chair you see is just a vehicle it’s not who i am why won’t you look me in the eye when you turn away i still exist i went so you could be free to be you i pray you never see the things i lived you would have been proud to stand next to me i fought bravely and now you can’t look me in the eye? what are you afraid you’ll see i may have left parts of myself there in that desert of blood but i am whole – inside no matter how many times you turn away you will never take that from me look at me – look me in the eye don’t hide from your shame i ask nothing of you except to be treated as the man i am so look me in the eye next time i am a man i am your brother i am your son i don’t need your pity or your front row parking kc08 |
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Very nice KC, don't change a thing.
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Bravo,, Bravo.... Wow,,,
Speechless,,,, |
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awwww thank you
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That was really good KC...I agree, don't change a thing. That was forceful as if you were the guy yourself.
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Very nice KC, don't change a thing. thank you so much |
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That was really good KC...I agree, don't change a thing. That was forceful as if you were the guy yourself. thanks wolf this had a chance to be really powerful i just did not have the time |
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That was really good KC...I agree, don't change a thing. That was forceful as if you were the guy yourself. thanks wolf this had a chance to be really powerful i just did not have the time Well I pictured as being powerful...I could see Tom Cruise from the movie Born on the Fourth Of July...shaking his fist at people who treat him different. |
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That was really good KC...I agree, don't change a thing. That was forceful as if you were the guy yourself. thanks wolf this had a chance to be really powerful i just did not have the time Well I pictured as being powerful...I could see Tom Cruise from the movie Born on the Fourth Of July...shaking his fist at people who treat him different. thanks robert i never pictured that for some reason |
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hmmm, this was 20 minutes huh? Wonder would it get better if you took longer. You hit some really good nerves on this one kc. My advice to the guy would be keep the front row parking, it's one of the rare thank-you's you truly received from this Country.
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WOW that was powerful had the whole vision as I was reading very good indeed
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hmmm, this was 20 minutes huh? Wonder would it get better if you took longer. You hit some really good nerves on this one kc. My advice to the guy would be keep the front row parking, it's one of the rare thank-you's you truly received from this Country. i am not sure if it would. thank you for your comments |
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That was good I had no idea what you were going to do with it but I like the way you went Thank you for doing this for me I know it started as a joke and you were nice to go along stef |
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WOW that was powerful had the whole vision as I was reading very good indeed thank you kristi |
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kc That was good I had no idea what you were going to do with it but I like the way you went Thank you for doing this for me I know it started as a joke and you were nice to go along stef no problem stef it was kind of fun |
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very powerful!
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Very well said!!! |
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Very well said!!! very powerful! thank you both |
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Looked good from where I'm sittin. Excellent write for the time frame and you captured the essence of the spirit well.
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Looked good from where I'm sittin. Excellent write for the time frame and you captured the essence of the spirit well. thank you my friend it was a fun exercise, only wish i had more time |
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