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than i can see two am two IMs flutter across my dreams there isnt much to know about me save that i dont really know what i am here for any particular purpose there isnt much to know about me save ill save you from this. and i dont think you get my point and i dont know if ive got it goin' on and i dont really care if this shrugs sickness to see you there, well i cant surmount the mountains of scans and faxes land of fascists lets fight a war, babe lets shun the silly little serendipitous sodomy of living life tonight- im all alone here. i never minded it till i couldnt place my finger on the contour you left on my bedsheets. the ring in the air full of wanderin' low notes, strummed in a key i am all too unfamiliar with so! what is it that i want to say that maybe i like it. yeah, maybe, baby, i like it just. this. way. its unlike i am alone here now but its just like i can never remember the fire that birthed me the circumstances that pulled me into this maelstrom of thought and un-thought i find a reason for every little mistake and i still cant find a season for the little litmus that reads a certain shade of grey i find myself scrounging for the meaning stuck in the couch cushions. i find myself clawing at the love wrapped in red tape. |
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Good write once more...
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interesting piece
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thanks :D
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Not a traditional use of the stanzaic form, which is probably why I find this piece interesting. Was good to read this. |
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thanks wilga. i rarely write things in standard meter, for that very reason. :D
LAMom as always <3 |
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thanks wilga. i rarely write things in standard meter, for that very reason. :D LAMom as always <3 Awwww that is just you a bit unusual but that is what catches our eyes and make us want to read more. Just keep up the good work love it. For some reason it reminds me the way Humphy Bogart talked guess that is what really catches my eye. He did have his on Style but one that was remembered for many many years. |
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Edited by
Unsane
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Fri 12/21/07 12:01 PM
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Awwww that is just you a bit unusual but that is what catches our eyes and make us want to read more. Just keep up the good work love it. For some reason it reminds me the way Humphy Bogart talked guess that is what really catches my eye. He did have his on Style but one that was remembered for many many years. humphrey bogart!? wow, talk about flattery. casablanca is one of the finest things to ever touch a screen. |
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excellent writing. I actually went back to find something that you had written, I like your style THAT much. keep it up.
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thank you very much. :D
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Of course you know your good, nice read...
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thanks.
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