I watched
In silence
from the womb of delusion
the whim and wisp of control
it came out crying
gasping for air
and you dear truth
let us dance with the dream of it
until our feet grew sore
and our legs grew weak
and our breathing became labored
collapse we did
and were baptized with powerlessness
drowned in the ocean of our futility
we sank into its sandy bottom
and there found the foundation of our resilience
in patience and trust
with life on its terms
we plead guilty to lose our shame
and touched the heavens
as lightning striking up
from hell below
and lighting up the heavens
and seeing again for the first time
what we closed our eyes to see

A well composed piece.

Nice poem .

You are a true poet. If you wish you can copy and paste this poem to my thread... Ladywind's vent and chat thread. I really want to critique this poem gently and as friends. I shall bump my thread and if you choose to have me critique your poem, it would be my honor

Thank You so much for the compliment! Feel free to copy and paste it wherever you wish. I am new to these forums and dont know how to find threads yet.