Topic: closing eyes, fingers move. | |
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and now, a little contemplation on something many guys are too proud to admit; lust.
*** i once cared. i once watched every race every little line of restraint. watched them, and tried to figure it out tired to watch them crush me into oblivion. i didnt know that it had already happened. its its kinda funny. kinda funny how things work. i think that maybe i dont know you as well as i thought though, hey, whats the problem? ive got thelook youve got the moves, and all in all we are both oh so lonely never mind the fifteen girls watching me looking away as i look forward. wishing to be that one that one i call you so i dance here. ashamed of the only thing that keeps my alive. my drive to be with you - it has been so long so now the scene melts and i wonder what in the f*ckinghell i was thinking when i said ive got nothing for you to live. i want to leave here. i want you to come with me. sure, the storm will follow us but what can we do about it? run faster? you know that we have no chance oh boy, i still think about the subtle curve of your chest even as the world promises to crush us. so hey, lets stay here. no, i wont hurt you. i will protect you. just take off that shirt. yes, just like that. tell me you love me. that turns me on. |
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im a fan, keep it up man
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don't ask me why... but it made me think of Dance, Soterios Johnson, Dance by Jonathan Coulton... I think it was the dancing bit... I don't actually know. But I like the peice. Very nice.
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Another good one great write its is different style but hey
that is what life is about being differnt keep it up. |
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Loved it and loved the ending. I sometimes stuggle with the endings to my poems. You're good.
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very good....keep writing
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yeah, i like the ending of this one too.
takes it from being a pretty love poem to being sort of crude and very human. |
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