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I've had a few relationships recently... that just didn't fit, and we both realized it, but we didn't want to be alone... so... yeah.
I can see the spaces between your words the things you’re afraid to say. I already know what is coming, I’ve seen it heading my way Just speak to me for now allay all of my fears and later on down the road someone else will dry my tears. I know you do not love me as I do not love you, but we did not wish to be alone so what else could we do. You speak of your confusion I speak of my remorse I will leave you to your life let nature take it’s course. I know somehow it all will be alright and somewhere down this lonely road the day will change to night So softly sleeping my memories will haunt my thoughts no more I will not think of holding you or laughing at the store I will find a new beginning upon the returning day but now I face your hiding words And I hear what you don’t say |
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i love this did you write it
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Yeah, I wrote it last year I think... I'm mostly pulling out all my old work at the moment... trying to get some critiques and stuff to see where I should go with new peices.
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Hannah you write great..don't worry about the critics...you have good flow in your poetry and I enjoy reading it. Keep it up.
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I don't worry about critics... I'm happy about my work, good bad or otherwise. I just want to know how I could improve it at all. I really like writers like Emily ****enson, who choses her words so carefully... but I also like Robert Frost, who just takes time to recognise simple moments. I want someday to write a poem that affects people at the same level that theirs do. To really leave a lingering mark.
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h, keep up the good work
dont worry about what others think or say. like i told you the other day let your heart come through and shine bright for all to see. |
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Yeah, I wrote it last year I think... I'm mostly pulling out all my old work at the moment... trying to get some critiques and stuff to see where I should go with new peices. |
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HAHA! I can't believe it bleeped out the name of a famous poet! Hahahaha!
Thanks for your support guys. |
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Well when I read your poems, you leave a lingering mark. You put a descriptive picture in the mind to dwindle on. You use your words rather well to put that flow that you need. You do a great job. KC and I can see it...so you should too.
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Thanks.
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sounds like wahts about to happen to me for real
if u want to improve nearly say what you want when its remorseful peoples feelings will put the words together and make the pretty things rhyme so people can feel a little bit of sweetness |
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very nice
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great writing, loved the ending
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