Topic: Destroyed In Your Love | |
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Reminiscent, I recall the times we had
When I felt, your comforting hands. When your eyes, shined with love for me When your love, was deeper than the sea. When it seemed you completed my life When I regarded you as my paradise. But, blinded in love, I didn’t realize That even you, had a wicked side. I still remember, that disturbing day That day… when you drew away. Shattered, my life was in a disarray Coldly, we parted, on our separate ways. I miss, your comforting hands But, you need space, I understand. I aspire, that love in your eyes But, I guess all that was lies. Even Adam, wouldn’t have cried on being banished, from the paradise. The way, tears of blood, I cried Upon loosing you… My paradise. You left me, with my fears You gifted my eyes, many tears. Still I hope, you smile for years For I value, your smile more than my tears. You tricked me, in your satanic spell Yet for your future, I wish you well. For I can’t hate you, my darling dove Even if, I get destroyed in your love. |
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Thanks I'm glad you liked it
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I would change satanic spell to cruel spell. Satanic is too harsh and has different connotations. Otherwise, inspired and evocative. Very moving. Excellent work. You should publish.
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Some of it related to my ex.. however nicely said...
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Yea I tried to create alliteration with the satanic spell & by doing so wanted to portray the manipulator as an embodiment of an evil figure, but I respect your feedback. Thank you for your readership, the honesty & the kindness of your feedback.
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Some of it related to my ex.. however nicely said... thank you glad you liked it |
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Powerful! Love it!
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Lovely poem .
Thanks for sharing Dave. |
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