I've written a few poems and just want to know what other people think of them. I wrote them during different times in my life when certain things happened.


Fallen Angel

Her name is scarred, her face is dark
She knew she was doomed, right from the start
Though the pain of yesterday haunts today
She knows she just can't stay

Her wings are clipped, she falls from grace
Among the ashes, she finds her place
Alone and scared, curled up like a ball
The others did nothing, watched as she fall

Impossible to know the truth of this girl
How much she meant to one in the world
No longer praised, she cries out loud
She can't take the pain, no longer around

Gazing back on the life she once had
The memories of him, much too sad
She stands so tall, firm and strong
He was there for her, right or wrong


Father to Daughter

Laying in my tiny arms wrapped in pink
I finally have you, who could ever think
So sweet and warm, you know you're my queen
You're the most beautiful thing I've ever seen

I love you with all my heart, never ask why
I'll hold your hand and wipe your tears when you cry
I've waited so many years, so much pain
I knew my efforts would not be in vain

Nobody could imagine the loss I felt
The pain of darkness, my soul would melt
You shine light on me, whenever I'm down
Don't look there, I'm here, always around

You think you're alone, but you're not
Never forget all the things you got
My love, my soul, all of me is you
Use me, hold me, I'll never be through


My Angel

Her beauty is unmatched, unlike any other
Her love is so pure, just like a mother
She stands and stares, amazed at his grace
How can someone still walk in such a place

She likes him when he's right
She tells him never give up the fight
She loves him when he's wrong
He can't quit, has to be strong

Down on his knees, praying to Jesus
Looking around, not able to see us
We're here for you, always and true
Watching over, guiding you through

I see her, she's standing right here
So beautiful, takes away the pain and fear
My Angel, my love, forever beside me
No longer alone, together we're free

Mike...

So much heartfelt, beautifully written...

I wrote a few more that are quite a bit more on the depressing-side of love, so I am weary of posting them as I don't know what people would think.

Thank you for your comment, I appreciate it.

Edit: Here are a few more. They're more on the depressing side of love but I hope people can understand them.


One Dance

I see the girl, the one over there
She has blue eyes, and blonde hair
I don't know her, she doesn't know me
She seems sad, like she just can't see

Maybe she's blind, refuses to be glad
I don't know her past or what she's had
I want to learn, be by her side
Show her good things on life's long ride

I try not too rush, to push too fast
Things are good, only when they last
Yesterday held so much better days
It is hard, but there's no easy ways

I try so bad, for that one chance
I'm not much to see, at first glance
I talk too much, too many rants
All I need, is just one dance



Riddles

I speak in riddles, to all who ask
I hide the pain, behind my mask
I fear the hate, not being the best
Don't want to be just like the rest

Maybe I'm wrong, not seeing the real
I only know that which I feel
The doubt brings fear, pulling me down
I walk alone, not even able to frown

So lonely and hurt, the darkness surrounds
I lose my mind, nobody's around
The stage is set, one act to go
It's all on me, but I'm a no show

I Refuse to accept what He has done
Alone and scared, I get up and run
Can't find the words to show my heart
It's time for change, to make a new start



The Night

Knees are trembling, eyes are blurry
Time's running out, have to hurry
So much to do, so much left to say
I never thought it would end this way

Alone in the shadows of the night
I give up, I concede the fight
Here comes the dark, gone is the light
Down here, there is no wrong or right

I run so fast, to escape the past
Here comes my fate, finally, at last
I embrace with love, courage and care
He's nowhere around, here nor there

I show no fear, I shed more tears
I've tried so hard through the years
I feel her warmth, holding me tight
No longer afraid, I concede The Night