Topic: im the clown the one man show
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Fri 12/26/14 12:42 AM
hello all come and see the one man clown show open forever until the day there are no pies to throw. come and watch how I get humiliated and patronized, treated like the clown I am. come and see how I keep the face painted in a permanent smile so you don't see the tears welling up in my eyes, see how long you can treat the clown like crap until i cry. have a seat and ill have you laughing in no time. all you have to do is get to know me and you will see the clown in me singing and dancing so you don't notice all the pain im in. im the clown of the century ill tell you funny stories of the silly hope i have of one day my family wont think im a giant looser honk honk, ill balance plates while ill tell you funny stories of how while sitting in the living room with my kids and dad on Christmas day the phone rings... keep listening guys ill have you rolling on the floor with laughter.my dad answered the phone and starts talking with my brother he starts giving him advice about how to be happy in his life and everything will be fine... now listen up guys this is the funny bit, my dad says he is having the worst Christmas he has ever had because my sister didn't turn up. now just in case you thought you couldn't laugh anymore... my two eldest children look at me but all i could do was give them the clown show, as i cant let them see the pain and the tears burning my eyes so i distract them. we go home and i cry myself to sleep thinking i cant be worth anything at all because even my own dad doesn't love me.so folks that is just a little taster of the clown show i hope you enjoyed it, ill be on for the rest of my life. you can watch me get doors shut in my face and people looking at me with disappointment in there eyes oh and there are the tears when i think no one is looking. if your looking for the best clown in town you will have to look elsewhere as im only second best third best some even say i have no talent at all washed up and useless, some say im a total looser, all i know is im the clown the one man show ill be on till the day there are no more pies to throw.

HoneyFly's photo
Fri 12/26/14 01:07 AM
A sad poem really. :(




dreamerana's photo
Fri 12/26/14 01:20 AM
((((mom333))))

zzzippy56's photo
Fri 12/26/14 04:05 AM
^^[^one man clown show.....

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Sat 12/27/14 11:46 AM


This is a Masterpiece, truly deep, excellent write. smokin

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Sat 12/27/14 12:33 PM
I don't like to critique anyone's writing but grammar, spelling, and arrangement go a long way if you actually care about what you write. Sadly this sounds like a true story having just happened.

theseacoast's photo
Sat 12/27/14 12:57 PM
How deeply I understand this! :heart:

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Sat 12/27/14 01:52 PM
Edited by realcarebear on Sat 12/27/14 02:13 PM
flowerforyou mom333 sing and dance for your children and for yourself. There is a whole world out there mom full of loving people. Love yourself enjoy the world and be a happy clown. You'll attract people who are like you.

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Thu 01/01/15 01:52 PM

I don't like to critique anyone's writing but grammar, spelling, and arrangement go a long way if you actually care about what you write. Sadly this sounds like a true story having just happened.

I am often asked to indent paragraph spell correctly use punctuation .. in nother words try to do something someone elses way. yes it is harder to read but it is part and parcel of the poem I think. of the expression of self.
and yes I hope it is all just a reference and not experience.

as an example if I try to write properly I jam up. better to get a thought out and have only a few who relate get it than stress yourself out about someone elses issues...
I found it very amusing that people can read sentances miscspelld as long as there are the same amount of letters..
or somewhat close.. only people who want everything easy on them complain about grammer and punctuation and all that other fit in ****.

very interesting piece. I hope it serves its purpose. thank you for sharing.

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Tue 01/06/15 12:04 AM
I also agree with ryan1962 . the very nature of poetry is to write without law or restriction. Freedom. And is what it is.
Poetry can never be criticized. That is the entire point. Any true poet knows this.
Your poem is full of emotion that many can relate to. i will say that you are talented. You've expressed a common feeling in a brilliant way. Awesome.

A flower isn't concerned with any flowers near or far it just blooms.