Ok. I guess im curious..

Hi RenJiku

I thought the 2 photos of you were great, 1 showing a classy version, the other a adventurous version. both nice. I would get rid of the last one as it is just a black square.

I would leave the " lets not try to offend" phase out.. as it sets the tone.

I would mention that you like to travel, and really enjoy exploring Korea. And that you speak a few languages. that covers the fact that you like Korea.

I would close with something like " I am looking to possible start some friendships and share some good conversations".. and see where that approach takes you

I know what you are trying to convey, I just think I would " package" it differently. A little more approachable

just my opinion, hope it helps