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Topic: Opaque Tears
Up2Us Joined Sat 03/15/08 Posts: 3926	Sun 07/13/14 11:04 AM Edited by Up2Us on Sun 07/13/14 11:10 AM
Opaque Tears Crying opaque tears, she waits by the door. A malice filled heart rages with internal anarchy. Reflections of unrecognizable emotions, ripple upon a glass table top. He soon walks into the dilapidated front door. The cold gun has painted a cognitive mural. Pulling the trigger insidiously......BANG. .

Up2Us Joined Sat 03/15/08 Posts: 3926	Tue 07/15/14 07:59 PM Edited by Up2Us on Tue 07/15/14 07:58 PM
Adding the following ending. Pulling the trigger insidiously......BANG Lithely sinking to the ground, asking why. Through opaque tears she whispers, because I loved you. .

Up2Us Joined Sat 03/15/08 Posts: 3926	Wed 07/16/14 01:45 AM Edited by Up2Us on Wed 07/16/14 01:50 AM
Sometimes the following is true: "Heaven has no rage like love to hatred turned. Nor hell a fury like a woman scorned". .

teasingbrunette Joined Tue 05/26/09 Posts: 5449	Wed 07/16/14 06:12 AM Edited by teasingbrunette on Wed 07/16/14 06:19 AM
many images and layers in this piece...like your additions...

Up2Us Joined Sat 03/15/08 Posts: 3926	Wed 07/16/14 07:08 AM
Thank you teasingbrunette.... This write is like watching a twisted video for me.

teasingbrunette Joined Tue 05/26/09 Posts: 5449	Wed 07/16/14 10:25 AM
twists and turns exploring,creating

Up2Us Joined Sat 03/15/08 Posts: 3926	Wed 07/16/14 12:23 PM Edited by Up2Us on Wed 07/16/14 12:29 PM
twists and turns exploring,creating Interesting..... Now that sounds like us on the ~ hottest day

2KidsMom Joined Tue 09/30/08 Posts: 58206	Wed 07/16/14 12:43 PM
Wow!!!!..I loved it..every bit of it..

Up2Us Joined Sat 03/15/08 Posts: 3926	Wed 07/16/14 12:57 PM
Wow!!!!..I loved it..every bit of it.. Thanks 2KidsMom....

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