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Daybreak She stood on the hill overlooking the shore her heart breaking for a love that isn't anymore Violent waves crashing against the rocks below as great tides of loneliness begin to flow Raising her head to the lone moon in despair thoughts without him are to much to bare The wind billowing in her hair in the darkness of night whispers the desperate song , take flight, take flight Out of the mist she struggles, turns and walks away determined yet to face another day Of the new dawn air she starts to breathe sadness and sorrow begin to leave Glorious sunrise coming from the east a buoyant spirit has arisen she now feels at peace walking though the fresh meadow, blooms a new start the a lightness of being now filling her heart Gone is the darkness that she had begun to roam daybreak is here she now has returned home |
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Lovely, here's to a new start
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Edited by
littlelambkin
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Tue 09/03/13 06:58 AM
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thanks so much for reading the story poem and the feedback on it. I just kinda let it develop without really knowing how it would end.
I want to give a heads up to this fun poetry website that you can post your poems on. It's called poetry.com |
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Very nice and free-flowing. I liked it! You tend to rhyme well in this one, littlelamb. Things flow unimpeded and ring well at the ends.
Nicely done, may I? - ![]() tommy boy ==== |
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Very nice Lambkin
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Very nice Lambkin ![]() ![]() |
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Very nice and free-flowing. I liked it! You tend to rhyme well in this one, littlelamb. Things flow unimpeded and ring well at the ends. Nicely done, may I? - ![]() tommy boy ==== ![]() |
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