Topic: I'm Lost in the Dark
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Sun 12/16/12 03:18 PM
you are killing me…
a stake through my heart…
is this all a game
so you can tear me apart…
why did you love me
just to take it all away
cruelty doesn’t become you
do you hear what I say…
our passion
it consumes us
eats right through our souls…
do my tears stain your face
like me
your lust controls…
I can’t bear every torment
the pleasure
with all this pain…
do I smile
or do I cry…
you’re driving me insane…
STAY WITH ME LOVER
like you did
at the start…
strengthen all my weakness
else I’m lost
in the dark…

:heart:Copyright©AthenaRose 12/16/12:heart:

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Sun 12/16/12 09:19 PM
Something about this line gets to me especially:
do my tears stain your face


I like this rhyme at the end


at the start…
strengthen all my weakness
else I’m lost
in the dark


feeling anxious feelings reading it. flowerforyou


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Sun 12/16/12 10:23 PM
:heart: love this poem :heart:

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Mon 12/17/12 01:38 AM
Aaawww.. Sinner.. you honor me once again with your genuine response to my work.. and that it stirs feelings within you.. priceless.. thank you for taking the time to read and enjoy... flowerforyou

As always, MisLopez.. it's a pleasure... flowerforyou