I sit at the edge of the boat
and look into the distant sky
i see nothing but darkness everywhere
suddenly i see a ray of hope
a beautiful angel in a white gown
from the heavens she comes down
all i do is to look at her and
she shimmered like a million rubies
and her hair glittered like a million stars
i fell in love with her
and so did she with me and
at that moment i become enlightened
my life at once becomes brightened
but as i see her she fades away
and in my arms she lay
i watched her die in my arms
and i couldnt do anything to bring her back
i cried all day and night
as why i let her die without a fight
she was all i had and i let her slip away
all her fault was that she loved me
she was the biggest blessing god ever gave me
Alas she is dead and so am i
and just living enough to tell my tale
now i rest in peace with my beloved
just alive to tell my tale
the earth watches us meet
and the sky bows down before us to greet

hope everyone likes it this is my heart carved out in the form of a poem

please help me name it too

looks like its not good :(

..title?....

my heart carved out in a poem....

harsh...noone is saying that but you.

i'm here and its a lovely read.

teasingbrunette

Things take time, look up not down,

Your writes are deep, well done.

its a poem of us all not mine alone its by all us who write and share their poems here so can we make it a joint poem by all of us and make changes as all think best and also name which we all agree upon

Sweet Harsh. I speak for only myself. I am too busy to critique your work. There are websites you can go to, post & have your poetry seen. Poets may critique or not, depending on their workload They also teach form etc Message me if you want to know more.

i dnt know if i can match up with them or will they even agree to teach me but im happy if you all liked what i wrote