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Topic: your thoughts
Queene123's photo
Sun 07/29/12 05:01 PM
your thoughts
of owning the world
seem to be so lost
as wondering
where your thoughts
and feelings shall
be next
as the rain falls
your tears come
to a hault
wonder who
can trust
the world
as the goverment
that we tend to know
is greedy,
for money at hand
is total loss
as the sun shall shine
with a better day than the
past behind
preachergirl's photo
Sun 07/29/12 07:30 PM
your poetry lets me think i like
no photo
Mon 07/30/12 07:34 AM
flowers :thumbsup: :thumbsup: :thumbsup:
ChristTrueServant7's photo
Mon 07/30/12 11:09 AM
Well thought of could, it could use a few breaks or periods though, so the reader can take each line in, just as you intended. Good job and keep writing!

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