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Topic: Separation
Duck3017 Joined Mon 12/20/10 Posts: 63	Sun 02/19/12 08:33 PM
Separation Voices are so primal. They have their own opinions to feed, their own stomachs, their own caves to echo their egos. They seem to know a lot about everything. Today, nothing seemed right, as we watched our voices separate from our bodies while we sat, drinking in the fire before tea. We watched our voices hover over the room and clash, converging on tongues of smoke, then blow up in something pink. When our voices returned to us, our bodies had already distanced themselves like pollen from a bee, when honey means everything, or the way piano legs peel away from themselves with age. When I'm near you, sound flows out of my body. Come back to me dear, so I may hear again.

Sneaksintoyourheart Joined Fri 10/16/09 Posts: 19261	Sun 02/19/12 08:40 PM
Separation Voices are so primal. They have their own opinions to feed, their own stomachs, their own caves to echo their egos. They seem to know a lot about everything. Today, nothing seemed right, as we watched our voices separate from our bodies while we sat, drinking in the fire before tea. We watched our voices hover over the room and clash, converging on tongues of smoke, then blow up in something pink. When our voices returned to us, our bodies had already distanced themselves like pollen from a bee, when honey means everything, or the way piano legs peel away from themselves with age. When I'm near you, sound flows out of my body. Come back to me dear, so I may hear again. very nice enjoyed the read

Bravalady Joined Sun 01/01/12 Posts: 1034	Mon 02/20/12 05:31 PM
Oh, now YOU have talent. This was GREAT. Do you have more of these?

kc0003 Joined Fri 05/11/07 Posts: 26382	Mon 02/20/12 08:33 PM
nicely done

teasingbrunette Joined Tue 05/26/09 Posts: 5449	Thu 02/23/12 09:19 AM
i like this alot teasingbrunette

Belletinky Joined Thu 02/23/12 Posts: 5	Thu 02/23/12 02:22 PM
i love ur poem,its both mellow and sad,i sure ope she heard u dia.

bastet126 Joined Fri 12/07/07 Posts: 15553	Thu 02/23/12 02:50 PM
i like this a lot, but i can't help but see ecstasy :P always enjoy your writes duck!

iam4u Joined Fri 10/13/06 Posts: 30096	Thu 02/23/12 09:01 PM
A very cool transition Mr. Duck,,,very cool..

pennyg281 Joined Thu 11/08/07 Posts: 4348	Thu 02/23/12 09:08 PM
Nice write:)

ShannonMarie21 Joined Thu 02/17/11 Posts: 1169	Thu 02/23/12 10:00 PM
Wow. Very nice!

Duck3017 Joined Mon 12/20/10 Posts: 63	Sat 02/25/12 11:13 PM
Sneaksintoyourheart, thank you for the drink. The flower is now in a vase. Bravalady, I only have one Separation poem, but the copies are free. kc0003, thank you thank you teasingbrunette, I appreciate your kind words, thank you belletinky, I'm glad this stirred some emotion. For what it's worth, I had no one in mind when I wrote this. bastet126, and I appreciate your continued support, thank you iam4u, I appreciate your continued support as well. I'll share that beer with you pennyg281, thank you ShannonMarie21, you are too kind Thank you all again for dropping by and commenting, Duck!

mig25 Joined Sun 08/10/08 Posts: 1537	Sun 02/26/12 12:43 AM
This is truly a wonderful piece . . . you are talented. Man you are talented.

Duck3017 Joined Mon 12/20/10 Posts: 63	Mon 02/27/12 09:11 PM
Mig25, the pleasure is all mine. Thank you for dropping by, Duck!

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