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i have claimed countless
nights like this; sleeping on a floor when a bed even would be too cold. and the lingering sting of limes across fingertips of memories pawing at my lips opens me wide like a science project grasshopper, good for students of craft. over-ripe smelly replaceable, yes, there have been claimed nights like this one. my most faithful whores were virgins and my most forgiving readers were lovers, cherry stem hips tongue-tied to the dirty bed i don't own. and the floor smells like a solvent and my lungs burn a little and i'd rather keep it empty as i can when they come for my poems i want them to have to dig like dying ants against the soft grey tissue i belong to. if you love me so much why don't you lick my eyes taste my sorrow or at least help me shop for a new lamp. then she twisted the knife as she pulled it out of my side and we cuddled for a few minutes before i couldn't stand to look at her bedsheets. |
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one word, AWESOME
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i have claimed countless nights like this; sleeping on a floor when a bed even would be too cold. and the lingering sting of limes across fingertips of memories pawing at my lips opens me wide like a science project grasshopper, good for students of craft. over-ripe smelly replaceable, yes, there have been claimed nights like this one. my most faithful whores were virgins and my most forgiving readers were lovers, cherry stem hips tongue-tied to the dirty bed i don't own. and the floor smells like a solvent and my lungs burn a little and i'd rather keep it empty as i can when they come for my poems i want them to have to dig like dying ants against the soft grey tissue i belong to. if you love me so much why don't you lick my eyes taste my sorrow or at least help me shop for a new lamp. then she twisted the knife as she pulled it out of my side and we cuddled for a few minutes before i couldn't stand to look at her bedsheets. Read this! You might try to hate it, but it will be impossible if you like your meat rare...Amazing content, second helping please! |
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nice to see you and your writing again |
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Amazing write PP..Love how your words talk..
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Even nice and kind feels like a whore.
Headless unable to taste the cake of retribution in this execution. |
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You seem to always make me relate although we couldn't be farther apart. Amazing as you. So have you left for Cali yet?
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wonderfully done...
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plastic_pancakes...likeit!
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Your poems always make their OWN very COOL STATEMENTS of expressions and voids we sometimes fall into in our own Worlds of living out life..
I like most of everything I have read that you write,,and trust me here,,I AM NO-ONE to give YOU justice in your writings. I read,,and make sillys of my own complications of this life? I personally think and feel,,your DAMN GOOD at working words with that dark area WE ALL CARRY inside us. Now,,only because I am maybe a simple man of thoughts here,,lol When reading most of your writes,,TO ME,,OK?,,lol,, They seem to TRY and go ,,,just a little to long in statement around the feelings your making,,not greatly,,but less,,would be so much MORE, in the whole to me? I LOVE the depths you draw us into,,and the perceptions using the darker interiors to draw an awareness with. But some seem to over-GIVE THAT! Like YOUR trying to hard to dramatize that picture in our minds? OK,,IF any of THIS made any sense to you at all,,lol,, I don't EVER give ANYONE my ALL in thoughts to be this critical of any ones writings,You see its because I truly feel your above MANY in your way of expressing the inner truths to so many lives.. I hope THIS doesn't offend you as its truly a compliment HERE,,I have never given to a writer..I DON'T CRITIQUE,,,,YET,,I did here for this and for you,,in hopes of one day saying,,I KNOW THIS MAN'S WORK,, He USE to be on Mingle,,,As A friend reads me a poem from a book you wrote....... GOOD LUCK in ALL YOU DO,,and ALWAYS,,keep on writing with all you feel..... |
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Great write.
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