Topic: the light
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Tue 07/17/07 08:19 AM
the sun peeks through the blinds
blinding me, hurting me
just as u hurt me last night.

ur words were crushing
humiliating
u tore out my heart
and bruised my soul

when will you see the light?
when will you feel the hurt you have caused?
when will your heart be broken like you have broken mine?


i hear from a friend
that you were playing all along.
there were other girls
saying cruel things behind my back.

i hope that one of them will hurt u
crush ur soul
tear out ur heart
and give u a taste of ur own medicine.

maybe then u will see the light
maybe u will feel the pain u have caused
and maybe then ur heart will be broken like u have broken mine.



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Tue 07/17/07 08:35 AM
yeah, ok, i suck at poetry, lol

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Tue 07/17/07 08:38 AM
i loved that poem, it was very true to the heart sounds like my writing lol keep it up i would love to seemore

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Tue 07/17/07 08:48 AM
I love it too, Thanks :smile:

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Tue 07/17/07 09:00 AM
You do not suck at poetry, SPS. This has wonderful imagery and powerful sentiment!

Well done!

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Tue 07/17/07 09:04 AM
thank you all

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Tue 07/17/07 09:11 AM
Thanks Sweetie, that was very moving.

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Tue 07/17/07 10:45 AM
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Tue 07/17/07 10:46 AM

Very nice! flowerforyou

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Tue 07/17/07 01:12 PM
sweetpie, you don't suck in poetry, you can closed the blind, your eyes don't hurt anymore, but hurt inside is different, goodflowerforyou flowerforyou flowerforyou

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Tue 07/17/07 01:34 PM
Hi!S~P~S.I think that was simply bearific.How in the world could U possibly come to the assumption that U suck @ Poetry.I beg 2 differ,for this work is brimming with heartfelt emotion that is pouring out to the perp.in your life who wronged U.Please do not down yourself sweetheart for this hinders upon one's self-esteem K.You are beautiful & you're expression is equally as powerful.I luv this read hon.Godspeed!Cybear;=)
:smile: :tongue: flowerforyou :heart: blushing embarassed
p.s.Please submit more K,we'd love 2 read it seriously.((((bear~hugs)))

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Tue 07/17/07 02:37 PM
It didn't suck at all.Very well writtenflowerforyou