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the sun peeks through the blinds
blinding me, hurting me just as u hurt me last night. ur words were crushing humiliating u tore out my heart and bruised my soul when will you see the light? when will you feel the hurt you have caused? when will your heart be broken like you have broken mine? i hear from a friend that you were playing all along. there were other girls saying cruel things behind my back. i hope that one of them will hurt u crush ur soul tear out ur heart and give u a taste of ur own medicine. maybe then u will see the light maybe u will feel the pain u have caused and maybe then ur heart will be broken like u have broken mine. |
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yeah, ok, i suck at poetry, lol
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i loved that poem, it was very true to the heart sounds like my writing lol keep it up i would love to seemore
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I love it too, Thanks
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You do not suck at poetry, SPS. This has wonderful imagery and powerful sentiment!
Well done! |
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thank you all
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Thanks Sweetie, that was very moving.
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Very nice! |
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sweetpie, you don't suck in poetry, you can closed the blind, your eyes don't hurt anymore, but hurt inside is different, good
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Hi!S~P~S.I think that was simply bearific.How in the world could U possibly come to the assumption that U suck @ Poetry.I beg 2 differ,for this work is brimming with heartfelt emotion that is pouring out to the perp.in your life who wronged U.Please do not down yourself sweetheart for this hinders upon one's self-esteem K.You are beautiful & you're expression is equally as powerful.I luv this read hon.Godspeed!Cybear;=)
p.s.Please submit more K,we'd love 2 read it seriously.((((bear~hugs))) |
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It didn't suck at all.Very well written
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