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We fell in love in a broken place
We turned our eyes from the blinding light Wandered away from the path of grace Drowning fast in the dark of night Your gentle touch turned as cold as stone Your selfishness; poison in my veins My heart is broken; I'm so alone What did I do to deserve this pain? The weight of this curtain that’s dropped on my back Is crushing my bones; my lungs have collapsed It came out of nowhere, crippling my soul The rudders have shattered; I have no control Flashing, foreboding, The Exit reads “Entrance” Stuck in this horror that doesn’t make sense My wings have been clipped as I fall from the sky A shot in the dark; I hear no reply Our hearts have been broken, hardened, and bruised Our minds have been poisoned; severely confused Our bodies are tired and frail like the veil that has wrapped our souls up in the pirate’s black sail We had our dreams right in front of us All lights were green on the open roads How did this diamond turn to dust? Sweetie please help me I still don't know “Another chance” is far too late To turn this ship away from it’s hate The power’s gone out; the show can’t go on The air is afire with affliction songs |
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i can read this poem over and over,and every time i read it,i get a new meaning,,,, i do'nt know about you?
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Nice write.
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That was a very enjoyable read. Thanks for sharing.
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am glad u enjoy'd readin it
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A very deep write, on a number of levels....
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A very deep write, on a number of levels.... skin deep |
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A very deep write, on a number of levels.... skin deep "We fell in love in a broken place" Falling into love & out into heartache.....Both can become deep on a number of levels. If there was more then just lust. |
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Edited by
prashant01
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Mon 10/31/11 01:04 PM
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That was a very enjoyable read. Thanks for sharing. Enjoyable read?? In what way,May I know? It's a good work but I didn't felt any joy or grace while reading it.Rather it's a sad,gloomy worded. As OP said there would be different meanings at every other read,but I wonder how can this be a enjoyable read!! Anyway,I felt its meaning jumping & turning around at every other stanza giving no particular direction/theme/meaning in the end. Sorry,If been much critical. but I just can't refrain. May be poem is best & my senses are limited. |
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all positive and negative critics are welcomed
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all positive and negative critics are welcomed |
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all positive and negative critics are welcomed i did, my friend wrote it. he is a poet. |
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