hey sorry i know i posted one yesterday but ive got a bazillion. most of these writings are songs ive written. critique away.

i took
the night alone
to reflect on the thoughts
of where i used to be
when my life
didn't stare back at me
like a stranger
that i have never seen
with the judgement
of what ive become

someone take this memory
someone please
i cant sleep
through the thought
of what i was meant to be
and where i am now
is there a difference
between these lives?

the night is young
but it feels like ive been awake forever
this place drags on
and pulls me in
to forget what dreams i have
long since forgotten
ive become a sea of complacency
since these dreams
have left me

someone take this memory
someone please
i cant sleep
through the thought
of what i was meant to be
and where i am now
is there a difference
between these lives?

so this reflection
made me see
exactly where i need to be
and i'm not afraid
of the uncertainty
of where this could take me
so i'll become everything i wanted
to ever be


someone take this memory
someone please
i cant sleep
through the thought
of what i was meant to be
and where i am now
is there a difference
between these lives?

IF YOU COULD PLAY IT LIVE THAT IMPACTS MORE.....

oh no doubt... i just wanted to post it on here to see what ne body thought of the lyrics

it seems chorus heavy, hard to tell without hearing it. but i like the words, it has a lyrical ring to it, i am imagining acoustical?

i agree it's chorus heavy. but i write my music way before i write my lyrics and thats just how it came out. theres a pause before the last chorus. and it slows down. and yeah it's definatly acoustic. i love acoustic music but i have more fun playing punk and metal. but unfortunately u cant do that by urself

every artist has a vision, and it works the way it works! and i metal out to rock band all the time by myself

lol yeah, i dont have a ton of control over what comes out as far as the actual music is concerned. and i definatly play me some rockband too!