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Topic: This night/Tonite
sugarjen Joined Tue 11/07/06 Posts: 2265	Fri 07/16/10 08:53 PM
Here you are again tonite Right where you belong... For you belong to me Here you are again tonite With arms so strong... You pull me close And hold me tight Again tonite There you are again tonite Waited so long for you Right here right now... This night There you are again tonite Lying there ... what a beautiful sight Waiting for me Again this night Watching you/ wanting me Wanting you.... Inside of me All over me Take over me Completely Over and over.... Take over me

iam4u Joined Fri 10/13/06 Posts: 30096	Fri 07/16/10 09:46 PM
Ya SEE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! NOW THATS WHAT I'M LOOKING FOR!!!!!! A lady that really wants to be held and loved every night and day... Nice write girl,,,and I hope your doing well,,,hugs

kc0003 Joined Fri 05/11/07 Posts: 26382	Fri 07/16/10 09:49 PM


ValentinaSS Joined Sun 05/23/10 Posts: 966	Sat 07/24/10 08:35 AM
ah, liked it

Gossipmpm Joined Tue 03/03/09 Posts: 19414	Sat 07/24/10 09:12 AM
That felt nice!!

Gwendolyn2009 Joined Thu 04/30/09 Posts: 328	Sun 07/25/10 01:52 PM
Argh. The rhyme is forced and so repetitive, that the sentiment in this poem could be expressed in four lines.

sugarjen Joined Tue 11/07/06 Posts: 2265	Sun 08/08/10 08:42 PM
If ya dont like it thats fine, we all on here have our own unique way and style of writing. We put our soul and emotions into our writing. No need to be mean. Oh and one more thing.....its repetitive because i purposely wrote it that way...it is my expression!

ValentinaSS Joined Sun 05/23/10 Posts: 966	Sun 08/08/10 10:05 PM
it made me feel like feeling rapturously in love

Shasta1 Joined Wed 09/09/09 Posts: 3308	Sun 08/08/10 10:50 PM
Ya SEE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! NOW THATS WHAT I'M LOOKING FOR!!!!!! A lady that really wants to be held and loved every night and day... Nice write girl,,,and I hope your doing well,,,hugs Terry, I thought you were with your new love, I hope that things are right for you.

Shasta1 Joined Wed 09/09/09 Posts: 3308	Sun 08/08/10 10:54 PM
If ya dont like it thats fine, we all on here have our own unique way and style of writing. We put our soul and emotions into our writing. No need to be mean. Oh and one more thing.....its repetitive because i purposely wrote it that way...it is my expression! And it is yours, we all develope our own wonderful lines of prose. I thought it very well, strong. As in life, our feelings grow stronger as it goes along so did your words. I took alot of Literature/writing in College, and know what am saying. Things have changed for me since a M/C accident and the writing, even normally, is poor at times due to cognitive problems which worsen when tired. The emotion touched my heart and know that feeling, which can be very difficult to express....you did so beautifully.

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