Topic: Bittersweet (Rubaiyat, Persian poetry format)
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Sat 12/19/09 07:34 PM
Bittersweet

I've tried to remain free
from the sweet scent of ecstacy
however love is all too powerful
even for the likes of me

abandonement caused bitter tears
sufficed through so many years
sworn never to love again
but rather hide within my fears

but age has a distinct way
to allow old wounds to lay
dormant and silent
so that the child may play

she loves me, she loves me not
while contemplating what I've got
along with what could have been lost
had my heart continued to rot.....

Rubaiyat, Persian poetry format
where the first second and fourth line rhyme, in a four line stanza poem

MirrorMirror's photo
Sat 12/19/09 07:38 PM

Bittersweet

I've tried to remain free
from the sweet scent of ecstacy
however love is all too powerful
even for the likes of me

abandonement caused bitter tears
sufficed through so many years
sworn never to love again
but rather hide within my fears

but age has a distinct way
to allow old wounds to lay
dormant and silent
so that the child may play

she loves me, she loves me not
while contemplating what I've got
along with what could have been lost
had my heart continued to rot.....

Rubaiyat, Persian poetry format
where the first second and fourth line rhyme, in a four line stanza poem
:thumbsup:

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Sat 12/19/09 08:44 PM
Nice...!!!

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Sat 12/19/09 09:08 PM
This was nice, and I get it,,although to me.
I dis-like a required format for my free thoughts?
As to your use of words, I liked that,, much..

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Sun 12/20/09 06:24 AM
I like it..
and like the challenge of making a piece
fit in the format..
teasingbrunette