Topic: in the blue notes
jimz's photo
Tue 10/06/09 02:59 PM
Edited by jimz on Tue 10/06/09 03:05 PM
i have an over(lapp
ing concern

the cliffnotes
sky guitar clouds

birds tourists bums
and i the I
deal
lt

a blow to
nep
tun
ing

my ocean song
the rhythm of Aphrodite
made up

rolling and rolling
waves of poet souls
trying to escape
tourist bodies

yet the glue
of whale and dust
and seawater
holds them in

they look out
and see

remembering
no(thing)

MirrorMirror's photo
Tue 10/06/09 04:27 PM

i have an over(lapp
ing concern

the cliffnotes
sky guitar clouds

birds tourists bums
and i the I
deal
lt

a blow to
nep
tun
ing

my ocean song
the rhythm of Aphrodite
made up

rolling and rolling
waves of poet souls
trying to escape
tourist bodies

yet the glue
of whale and dust
and seawater
holds them in

they look out
and see

remembering
no(thing)
:thumbsup:

lurchs_sister's photo
Wed 10/07/09 09:50 AM
(((Jim)))flowerforyou The melody of this is like floating in that deep blue. Very nicely done!!