Topic: Something's Wrong
AZKait's photo
Tue 09/01/09 08:55 AM
Hear them in the hall, can’t make out their words...
Someone’s sobbing, muffled sighing...
Where am I? Sleeping? No...I think...maybe?
I’m thinking anyway...in the dark...
My feet are cold...damn cold feet...
I’m awake, fatigued...sleepy, dreamy...lucid mind a-wander?
My heart beats...my body paralyzed...thank heavens...I am alive...
I’ll just wait here, buried alive, in my fractured skull...
Healing...and hoping they don’t treat me as if I’m not...there...

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Tue 09/01/09 08:55 AM
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MzEm's photo
Tue 09/01/09 12:16 PM

Hear them in the hall, can’t make out their words...
Someone’s sobbing, muffled sighing...
Where am I? Sleeping? No...I think...maybe?
I’m thinking anyway...in the dark...
My feet are cold...damn cold feet...
I’m awake, fatigued...sleepy, dreamy...lucid mind a-wander?
My heart beats...my body paralyzed...thank heavens...I am alive...
I’ll just wait here, buried alive, in my fractured skull...
Healing...and hoping they don’t treat me as if I’m not...there...



The vitims of stroke often remind me of what this poem speaks of. Frozen inside their mind but unable to tell anyone they can still hear and understand....Good job...

Fusion99's photo
Tue 09/01/09 12:24 PM

Hear them in the hall, can’t make out their words...
Someone’s sobbing, muffled sighing...
Where am I? Sleeping? No...I think...maybe?
I’m thinking anyway...in the dark...
My feet are cold...damn cold feet...
I’m awake, fatigued...sleepy, dreamy...lucid mind a-wander?
My heart beats...my body paralyzed...thank heavens...I am alive...
I’ll just wait here, buried alive, in my fractured skull...
Healing...and hoping they don’t treat me as if I’m not...there...

Great write, you can take alot out of this as to the actual message. I enjoyed this alotdrinker drinker drinker

AZKait's photo
Tue 09/01/09 03:24 PM
:heart: Thank you for reading...I am grateful for your thoughts and your comments!:heart:

Something's been missing from my life for a long while now...I believe it's been a need for intense, focused expression. I've been most happy lately...being a part of this community. :heart:

...and reading what people write here...I feel most at home...and grounded...thank you!

MzEm's photo
Tue 09/01/09 03:36 PM

:heart: Thank you for reading...I am grateful for your thoughts and your comments!:heart:

Something's been missing from my life for a long while now...I believe it's been a need for intense, focused expression. I've been most happy lately...being a part of this community. :heart:

...and reading what people write here...I feel most at home...and grounded...thank you!


If I haven't said it before, welcome to the poetry forum.