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Topic: "Black Ice Heart"
Fusion99 Joined Thu 07/09/09 Posts: 927	Fri 08/21/09 08:47 AM
1 degree above Absolute Zero... Do you see my absent love, my tainted hero....? Absolute Zero? all atomic motion STOPS. Absolute Zero? all molecules frozen like a dead clock. I grew like this Black Ice, cold and trecherous. I grew like this Black Frost, hard and amiss. Absolute Zero, all my blood frozen like a burgundy rock. Absolute Zero, all my heart's motion DROPS. Do you believe my absent love, my absent hero You can't warm me anything above 1 degree past Absolute Zero?

Gossipmpm Joined Tue 03/03/09 Posts: 19414	Fri 08/21/09 08:58 AM
One day fusion... Someone will grab that heart... And I promise you.... You will overheat!!!!!!!! Good write my man! Happy Friday!

maleah Joined Thu 07/16/09 Posts: 324	Fri 08/21/09 08:59 AM
1 degree above Absolute Zero... Do you see my absent love, my tainted hero....? Absolute Zero? all atomic motion STOPS. Absolute Zero? all molecules frozen like a dead clock. I grew like this Black Ice, cold and trecherous. I grew like this Black Frost, hard and amiss. Absolute Zero, all my blood frozen like a burgundy rock. Absolute Zero, all my heart's motion DROPS. Do you believe my absent love, my absent hero You can't warm me anything above 1 degree past Absolute Zero? ::sigh:: it's perfect

Differentkindofwench Joined Sat 04/07/07 Posts: 5960	Fri 08/21/09 09:13 AM
Great write, but I have seen you volcanic in here! No, you are no "cold fish".

Fusion99 Joined Thu 07/09/09 Posts: 927	Fri 08/21/09 09:56 AM
Gossip, Maleah and Different: Thank you for those 'warming" words I really appreciate it.

MzEm Joined Wed 03/25/09 Posts: 1558	Fri 08/21/09 10:01 AM
Very nicely done my friend!

Fusion99 Joined Thu 07/09/09 Posts: 927	Fri 08/21/09 10:06 AM
Very nicely done my friend! Thanks my friend. School goin okay for you?

LAMom Joined Tue 12/12/06 Posts: 26866	Fri 08/21/09 10:08 AM
Your spirit is filled with many arayssssssssssssss of life,, Cold is not one of them,,,,, Beautiful

Fusion99 Joined Thu 07/09/09 Posts: 927	Fri 08/21/09 10:18 AM
Thanks LA, you're sweet!

MzEm Joined Wed 03/25/09 Posts: 1558	Fri 08/21/09 10:20 AM
Very nicely done my friend! Thanks my friend. School goin okay for you? trying to write for school is so very different from writing for fun....Thanks for asking. You start next week right?

Fusion99 Joined Thu 07/09/09 Posts: 927	Fri 08/21/09 10:21 AM
Very nicely done my friend! Thanks my friend. School goin okay for you? trying to write for school is so very different from writing for fun....Thanks for asking. You start next week right? I started 2 days ago. And you are write, it IS alot different then writing here. Stick with it, you can do it!

Differentkindofwench Joined Sat 04/07/07 Posts: 5960	Fri 08/21/09 10:50 AM
Very nicely done my friend! Thanks my friend. School goin okay for you? trying to write for school is so very different from writing for fun....Thanks for asking. You start next week right? But ME, why does it have to be vastly different? Yes, it can be less opinionated, but still your style can peek through, your passion can still play.

MzEm Joined Wed 03/25/09 Posts: 1558	Fri 08/21/09 11:47 AM
Very nicely done my friend! Thanks my friend. School goin okay for you? trying to write for school is so very different from writing for fun....Thanks for asking. You start next week right? But ME, why does it have to be vastly different? Yes, it can be less opinionated, but still your style can peek through, your passion can still play. One prof said I have to tone down my "me-ness" to give the facts in a way that doesn't display so much of my opinion. It should almost read like a research paper "just the facts ma'am". It's cool though I just turn me off for the length of the paper LOL

Fusion99 Joined Thu 07/09/09 Posts: 927	Fri 08/21/09 02:12 PM
Very nicely done my friend! Thanks my friend. School goin okay for you? trying to write for school is so very different from writing for fun....Thanks for asking. You start next week right? But ME, why does it have to be vastly different? Yes, it can be less opinionated, but still your style can peek through, your passion can still play. One prof said I have to tone down my "me-ness" to give the facts in a way that doesn't display so much of my opinion. It should almost read like a research paper "just the facts ma'am". It's cool though I just turn me off for the length of the paper LOL I had that problem too....so you have to sacrifice personnal style or an A. I always chose the A!

MzEm Joined Wed 03/25/09 Posts: 1558	Fri 08/21/09 02:22 PM
Very nicely done my friend! Thanks my friend. School goin okay for you? trying to write for school is so very different from writing for fun....Thanks for asking. You start next week right? But ME, why does it have to be vastly different? Yes, it can be less opinionated, but still your style can peek through, your passion can still play. One prof said I have to tone down my "me-ness" to give the facts in a way that doesn't display so much of my opinion. It should almost read like a research paper "just the facts ma'am". It's cool though I just turn me off for the length of the paper LOL I had that problem too....so you have to sacrifice personnal style or an A. I always chose the A! Yeah I am feeling you. Work won't pay for school if you don't make the grades and I want all of this paid for LOL

kc0003 Joined Fri 05/11/07 Posts: 26382	Fri 08/21/09 02:25 PM
nicely done... a lot to think about here

Fusion99 Joined Thu 07/09/09 Posts: 927	Fri 08/21/09 02:27 PM
nicely done... a lot to think about here Thanks kc003, but now I'm curious as to your thoughts. You dont have to post them if you dont want to, but I love the feedback

Differentkindofwench Joined Sat 04/07/07 Posts: 5960	Fri 08/21/09 02:27 PM
Well pissss! I agree go for the A's. But hey, their loss is our gain, let that you-ness shine here both y'all!!!!! We get their you-ness oo-oo We get their you-ness oo-oo!!!!!!!

Fusion99 Joined Thu 07/09/09 Posts: 927	Fri 08/21/09 02:29 PM
Well pissss! I agree go for the A's. But hey, their loss is our gain, let that you-ness shine here both y'all!!!!! We get their you-ness oo-oo We get their you-ness oo-oo!!!!!!! I love your you-ness too!

MsTeddyBear2u Joined Fri 04/06/07 Posts: 22031	Fri 08/21/09 04:02 PM
Well pissss! I agree go for the A's. But hey, their loss is our gain, let that you-ness shine here both y'all!!!!! We get their you-ness oo-oo We get their you-ness oo-oo!!!!!!! What she said...