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Topic: He closed the door behind him...
maleah Joined Thu 07/16/09 Posts: 324	Mon 08/03/09 05:43 PM
pt-1 He closed the door behind him Changed my life forever Broken hearted The current Love of my life Recently gone College Bar hopping He was gorgeous He pointed at me Everyone was jealous No Not interested Too depressed Too in love He persisted Then I remembered Good guy Met him Years back Then a student Now an alumni He was 25 I'd be 20 soon Birthday dinner Excited and Happy In a time of desperate pain He was so confident Cocky really I wasn't He ordered shots Too nervous to say no Too drunk to walk We walked Outside his home Ready to go No Must put the food inside Really fast Then I'll take you home Inside He kissed me I tensed up Ready to go No Car keys upstairs Really fast Then I'll take you home He walked in his room after me Closed the door behind him Changed my life forever No pt-2 After he closed the door... The door shut Turned to protest To speak His tongue Disallowed that Hands pressed me Onto his bed I fought He was strong I was little Insignificant Begging Pleading Reasoning Until I saw His face Emotionless Eyes blank A robot I gave up Helpless Hopeless Knowing I'd already lost Next I stared All night At the wall It was black Until the sun's light Shown it's true color Blue He slept Peacefully I didn't Dare to Move Too Scared Guilty Empty Soulless Dirty Stupid Finally He awoke Smiling He drove me home Once inside I hid My face Shame Tears Fear Under blankets My Innocence gone Strength dissolved Confidence ruined Smile forever faded I saw him Senior year He approached me "Hello beautiful. Do you remember when we went out? We had fun, didn't we?" I stared Scared Finally I replied "It was a long time ago" His ego kicked He turned away from me Stared at the wall As I had done So many nights prior "Yeah, it was a long time ago. I sure hope you've learned some skills since then" I never really Came out From under the blankets I still hide Ache A wall In every Relationship A pain In every Love Fear Suffocates me Every day He closed the door behind him Changed my life forever

kc0003 Joined Fri 05/11/07 Posts: 26382	Mon 08/03/09 07:09 PM
GULP!!!! nothing i say can change what you went through, i know this. it is sad the way the world treats us at times. i can only hope with all of my heart that you have found more of the beauty than the foul. this write cuts deep into me im glad you can get it out

Differentkindofwench Joined Sat 04/07/07 Posts: 5960	Mon 08/03/09 07:09 PM
I hold my breath waiting, longing for part 3.

Ainjel Joined Sat 01/24/09 Posts: 3610	Tue 08/04/09 02:23 AM
Whoah...I'm holding my breath...>hugs<

LAMom Joined Tue 12/12/06 Posts: 26866	Tue 08/04/09 01:17 PM
Maleah.. I had to pause, catch my breathe and then just breath

meandu2 Joined Thu 10/11/07 Posts: 490	Tue 08/04/09 05:45 PM
Oh my!

ArtGurl Joined Sun 04/08/07 Posts: 17722	Tue 08/04/09 05:54 PM
oh girl

maleah Joined Thu 07/16/09 Posts: 324	Tue 08/04/09 05:56 PM
...thanks everyone for the comments...sometimes this is the only way to get it out...ya know?

Fusion99 Joined Thu 07/09/09 Posts: 927	Tue 08/04/09 07:01 PM
I like the writing style this was done in and I hope it gets better

DaveyB Joined Wed 10/10/07 Posts: 18786	Wed 08/05/09 10:07 AM
Wow... um, yeah wow, don't know what else to say. Excellent.

Differentkindofwench Joined Sat 04/07/07 Posts: 5960	Wed 08/05/09 10:16 AM
Yup, we do know that need to just "get it OUT" kinda like "out out damn spot"

AngelLight Joined Sat 04/12/08 Posts: 4817	Wed 08/05/09 08:33 PM
((((maleah)))) Love and comfort and peace to you, precious heart.