I believe my profile description is far unique than the typical "I am down to earth, etc." I was really wondering what people would typically think about my profile. The biggest reason is because I would message someone, and they usually would view my profile, then delete the message I sent them without replying. Can't win 'em all, I guess. I would like to know the following:


-What is different, or stands out about my profile?

-What are the major good things about it?

-Is there any things or areas I could improve on?


I really appreciate all the people who are going to respond, thanks in advance!

like mine does just like a sore thumb

Aww Mike.

First, it's UTMOST, not 'UPMOST'.

Second... your profile comes off, to me, as negative, judgmental, and arrogant. Now if that is who you are and how you present in person... leave it as you want to be honest. But if not, you have a lot of work to do. I'm not surprised you don't get replies. You sound as though you know it all, you're disgusted with the world, and your way is the best way.

Maybe it is just the opening statement? I will change it, but how do I "know it all?"

It is okay. However, it doesn't stand out. There are several typical cliches...

The second paragraph is a tough read. Do something about it such as breaking it into several smaller ones.

Fix the grammar errors. Also there is too much unnecessary infomation, i.e. "After I get this school loan paid off, I do plan to go back to college." I doubt anyone wants to read about your school loan.

Lastly, Lilith401 is right, there is too much negativity especially in the first paragraph. No one wants to read your b!tching right at the outset. I would guess a lot of women never get to the second paragraph. They say to themselves, "next!"

I fixed it, is that better?

I didn't see it before you made the changes, but it doesn't seem negative right now.

It is about a hundred million times better.

It basically said I was not into one night stands, and that I am disgusted how everyone is looking for sex.

I just thought I would give people a heads up, since a lot of girls on here is NOT looking for a casual encounter, but a relationship.

Well thanks everyone. I got the personality, so maybe later on I will post about my looks?

Well, your profile seems fine now. Best to leave out the negative stuff.