Topic: I Swear
SangRio's photo
Sat 03/07/09 06:44 PM
look into my eyes, and let me know what you see........

i swear i see the death rising toll clashing, skull breaking rule storming, light burning dark shading, my life changing, way of hatred, rulers patriots and abstract captivating, sound surrounding images with war and rumors escalating, ground dirt trembling under, boots filled with mud and cuts revealing, deadly spikes, contagious quarantined area filled with blood bathed empty shoes and blood drenched shirts, and i swear to you this is not a place of dismantled clean dirt....

I swear i hear the screeches and the battle cry, the ones who live been born to die, at young age around twenty nine, nine lives at stake like cats and pride, this way i hide, cause bullet hiss, with the ground shaking under my feet and wrist, i hear those desperate innocent cry in hunger and pain, i hear blood drop shower the streets like falling in vane, sensing the battlefield raging through like bulls in a Spanish parade, straight ahead are crooked bullets slinging a stray, and waves of enemy hordes leaving their ground troops behind, knowing only life to die counts more then life divides, and now its time to addict yourself prescription, and no soldiers of the past wont let future exceptions....

I swear I feel the heart pulsing pulse stretching, exonerating from any point you need to relieve, receive a rating of exaggerating desecrating a regulation in this evisceration of deteriorating words exclaiming to a more distorted past interminable future, a never ending sight, within many pulsating destructive force denied, within my eye i feel myopia in the center, cause of short distanced death i notice long term blurr of our future, unless we act upon, I Swear we might not make it, to a point in which we act, dont hold counter conflicting with in the diamonds we stack......

MirrorMirror's photo
Sat 03/07/09 06:46 PM

look into my eyes, and let me know what you see........

i swear i see the death rising toll clashing, skull breaking rule storming, light burning dark shading, my life changing, way of hatred, rulers patriots and abstract captivating, sound surrounding images with war and rumors escalating, ground dirt trembling under, boots filled with mud and cuts revealing, deadly spikes, contagious quarantined area filled with blood bathed empty shoes and blood drenched shirts, and i swear to you this is not a place of dismantled clean dirt....

I swear i hear the screeches and the battle cry, the ones who live been born to die, at young age around twenty nine, nine lives at stake like cats and pride, this way i hide, cause bullet hiss, with the ground shaking under my feet and wrist, i hear those desperate innocent cry in hunger and pain, i hear blood drop shower the streets like falling in vane, sensing the battlefield raging through like bulls in a Spanish parade, straight ahead are crooked bullets slinging a stray, and waves of enemy hordes leaving their ground troops behind, knowing only life to die counts more then life divides, and now its time to addict yourself prescription, and no soldiers of the past wont let future exceptions....

I swear I feel the heart pulsing pulse stretching, exonerating from any point you need to relieve, receive a rating of exaggerating desecrating a regulation in this evisceration of deteriorating words exclaiming to a more distorted past interminable future, a never ending sight, within many pulsating destructive force denied, within my eye i feel myopia in the center, cause of short distanced death i notice long term blurr of our future, unless we act upon, I Swear we might not make it, to a point in which we act, dont hold counter conflicting with in the diamonds we stack......




bigsmile good writeflowerforyou

SangRio's photo
Sat 03/07/09 06:59 PM
thanks, Much appreciated

darkowl1's photo
Sat 03/07/09 07:02 PM
it would make an incredible death-metal ensomble! very well written!!!drinker drinker drinker

SangRio's photo
Sun 03/08/09 10:01 AM
lol yeh, i wouldnt mind switching up a bit to death metal, even tho my aim was to make it into rock and rap, it would feel nice with the bass and the drums with a dark paino playing in the backround, you know, but yeh thanks

Sharris's photo
Sun 03/08/09 10:30 AM

look into my eyes, and let me know what you see........

i swear i see the death rising toll clashing, skull breaking rule storming, light burning dark shading, my life changing, way of hatred, rulers patriots and abstract captivating, sound surrounding images with war and rumors escalating, ground dirt trembling under, boots filled with mud and cuts revealing, deadly spikes, contagious quarantined area filled with blood bathed empty shoes and blood drenched shirts, and i swear to you this is not a place of dismantled clean dirt....

I swear i hear the screeches and the battle cry, the ones who live been born to die, at young age around twenty nine, nine lives at stake like cats and pride, this way i hide, cause bullet hiss, with the ground shaking under my feet and wrist, i hear those desperate innocent cry in hunger and pain, i hear blood drop shower the streets like falling in vane, sensing the battlefield raging through like bulls in a Spanish parade, straight ahead are crooked bullets slinging a stray, and waves of enemy hordes leaving their ground troops behind, knowing only life to die counts more then life divides, and now its time to addict yourself prescription, and no soldiers of the past wont let future exceptions....

I swear I feel the heart pulsing pulse stretching, exonerating from any point you need to relieve, receive a rating of exaggerating desecrating a regulation in this evisceration of deteriorating words exclaiming to a more distorted past interminable future, a never ending sight, within many pulsating destructive force denied, within my eye i feel myopia in the center, cause of short distanced death i notice long term blurr of our future, unless we act upon, I Swear we might not make it, to a point in which we act, dont hold counter conflicting with in the diamonds we stack......


Erosion

senses eroded
the need to feel
to talk yourself into
what should be real
where did I go
when I was reborn
why am I comfortable
embracing such scorn
what do I see
and why do I swear
perhaps the oath
to open and bare
no more to pull
away from the dying
death screams to life
and babies, still crying


Raine Les 3/8/2009

deep cuts, thank you