floating to you on a petal


I stare into the stream my tears create and watch the water slowly flow and flow... where does it go... i wonder. I look out the window. There is the plant that you helped me grow. There is the foundation where we planted the sead, on the bank of the stream created by my single tear. "It has grown, my dear, the plant so full of bloom " I whisper into the wind, hoping you can hear. I see my tear and watch a petal slowly fall. I feel so small and shrink into my emotions as I get carried away in my memories and feel myself floating to you on the petal ...

nice

thank you

Very nice. Lots of emotion felt in this.

If you don't mind my suggesting, breaking this down into stanzas can draw your readers further into the piece. Has lots of potential.

Thanks for sharing

Beautiful...

Thank you for sharing such a poignant moment

very nice