Topic: A verse I wrote,please comment me on this whether if you lik
Swagge's photo
Tue 12/09/08 06:58 PM
AFTER PEEPING YOU FOR A WHILE I PUT MY DOUBTS TO THE SIDE/ A CLOSED MOUTH DON'T GET FED I'M NOT ABOUT TO BE SHY/ YOU STAND OUT IN MY MIND THERE'S NO DOUBT THAT YOU'RE FLY/ MAYBE I COULD BE THE GUY TO SPEND YOUR PERSONAL TIME/ FOR YOUR HEAD TO YOUR TOES I'M FEELING YOUR VIBE/ I GOT AN EMPTY SEAT IF YOU'RE WILLING TO RIDE/ I'M NOT HOLLERING JUST TO **** UNLESS YOU GIVE ME A SIGN/ HONESTLY I WANNA KICK IT DOING SOMETHING YOU LIKE/ AND IF WE END UP HAVING SEX/ YOU DON'T HAVE TO BE STRESSED /JUST CONTINUE DOING YOU DON'T START ACTING LIKE THE REST/ IF I'M EVER DOWN AND OUT TREAT ME LIKE I'M AT MY BEST /CAUSE THE STRUGGLE COMES FIRST BEFORE YOU EVER REACH SUCCESS/ SO IF THIS SITUATION CONTINUES TO PROGESS /THEN THE SKY IS THE LIMIT ANY THING CAN HAPPEN NEXT YEAH//

It's kind of old but I was getting my LL cool J on lol

Atlantis75's photo
Tue 12/09/08 07:18 PM
Great! You have the talent. drinker

JUST CONTINUE DOING, YOU DON'T START ACTING LIKE THE REST/ IF I'M EVER DOWN AND OUT TREAT ME LIKE I'M AT MY BEST /CAUSE THE STRUGGLE COMES FIRST BEFORE YOU EVER REACH SUCCESS

Right there, that's me and my ex.




Differentkindofwench's photo
Wed 12/10/08 08:55 AM
Not bad, not bad at all. One suggestion though - change the type. All caps is great when you're reading off cards in front of a group, but it's a lil painful in a forum.

no photo
Wed 12/10/08 09:31 AM
I'm down with it. Did I say that right?laugh