Topic: A Poem That I wrote after me and my ex broke up | |
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I'm reminiscing on your tenderness and the snuggling and teasing
Missing what I remember, kissing and hugging and squeezing Bugging and weezing, I'm having trouble when breathing It's even tougher when sleeping But there's a couple of reasons that I'm suffering and grieving For loving and leaving, you all I'm thinking of in the evening You got my knees buckling and weakening Thoughts of nothing but freaking that I'm struggling to keep in And interrupt when I'm speaking I got some game that I'm preparing to run The way your lips sparkle and glare in the sun You got your hair in a bun, no matter what you're wearing you stun Cause your comparing to none, I wanna share in the fun I feel a passionate lust when I'm imagining just us alone at last with a touch I see you grasping to trust, but my intentions are good The seed is passing in dust I'm not asking to rush and answer immediately I just wanna be there for you and you to be there for me If you agree to repeat after me, I Love You (I love you baby) Cause I just need you to see, how much I'm eager to be Your man legally wed, your love's keeping me fed This is easily said, so you can lead or be led If you care to be down cause ain't nobody Like you no where to be found |
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you need to make this into a rap song.....it has a great meter to
it...well done and take all you can from what you have learned celebrate the moment you are in...keep it clean salut! |
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This is actually a song that I recently took into the studio and
recorded. I feel sometimes in my rymes i should do something that shows the softer side of myself. I'm iffy on the song itself thats why i put the first verse up in here to see what kind of response i would get. |
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Your poem written in waves of stresses. WOW
You right Alex ... Rap and what a beautiful writing. I feel and see it Thanks Lesn .... Well Done! :^) |
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WoW!!!!! Incredible indeed,, Beautiful writing from the heart
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Thank you prussia and mom. I have more that I'll put up later if anyone
is interested. |
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