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Topic: Looking Glass (revised)
MsWizard Joined Sun 07/01/07 Posts: 5488	Wed 08/27/08 06:57 AM
Peering through my looking glass in a rare and crystal clear moment of deep and painful introspection harsh inspection and sharp dissection my reflection mirrors a life fraught with shattered and elusive dreams lost or left scattered in the remnants of my own self gratifications …. I’ve given little to the men who would love me and ...everything … … to the men who would not … I’ve been absorbed by my own insanities vanities and desperate salvation often neglecting those who would love me without thought or reservation losing myself somewhere in the process … And now here I find myself stripped naked and standing on shaky uncertain ground as I look at you looking back at me Seeing all that I was … … all that I am … … and all … …I could and ...would be … … with you … Bared cruelly and unmercifully are these reflections in my looking glass staring back at my face through wounded wary yet hopeful eyes … ...questioning .. wondering .. Asking silently … Will you Love what you see when you see that it’s me… staring back ….at you… ... staring back ... ... at me ...?

kc0003 Joined Fri 05/11/07 Posts: 26382	Wed 08/27/08 07:41 AM
Thought it was fine the way it was but I do understand your want to tinker. Nice write Alicia as always

pkd1220 Joined Thu 05/24/07 Posts: 8318	Wed 08/27/08 08:53 AM
even more wonderful than before...

frankfk Joined Sun 09/24/06 Posts: 5684	Wed 08/27/08 08:59 AM
nice wiz, a soft i feel in it Peering through my looking glass in a rare and crystal clear moment of deep and painful introspection harsh inspection and sharp dissection my reflection mirrors a life fraught with shattered and elusive dreams lost or left scattered in the remnants of my own self gratifications …. I’ve given little to the men who would love me and ...everything … … to the men who would not … I’ve been absorbed by my own insanities vanities and desperate salvation often neglecting those who would love me without thought or reservation losing myself somewhere in the process … And now here I find myself stripped naked and standing on shaky uncertain ground as I look at you looking back at me Seeing all that I was … … all that I am … … and all … …I could and ...would be … … with you … Bared cruelly and unmercifully are these reflections in my looking glass staring back at my face through wounded wary yet hopeful eyes … ...questioning .. wondering .. Asking silently … Will you Love what you see when you see that it’s me… staring back ….at you… ... staring back ... ... at me ...?

d4tc Joined Tue 04/15/08 Posts: 2754	Wed 08/27/08 11:35 AM
Excellent revision.

MsWizard Joined Sun 07/01/07 Posts: 5488	Wed 08/27/08 01:16 PM
Thank you friends. I think I'm done playing with it now. smile

AngelLight Joined Sat 04/12/08 Posts: 4817	Wed 08/27/08 01:48 PM
Absolutely beautiful! Your choice to honestly look within will bring you everything you've ever dreamed of and more Thumbsup girlfriend

flame1cutie Joined Thu 04/24/08 Posts: 7307	Wed 08/27/08 01:52 PM
very nice write

Up2Us Joined Sat 03/15/08 Posts: 3926	Wed 08/27/08 02:09 PM
AWESOME WRITE.........

myanimalcracker Joined Wed 02/27/08 Posts: 900	Wed 08/27/08 07:23 PM
Amazing, MsWiz

MsWizard Joined Sun 07/01/07 Posts: 5488	Wed 08/27/08 11:38 PM
Absolutely beautiful! Your choice to honestly look within will bring you everything you've ever dreamed of and more Thumbsup girlfriend Thank you my Angelface How are you doing darling?

MsWizard Joined Sun 07/01/07 Posts: 5488	Wed 08/27/08 11:39 PM
very nice write Thank you Cutie

MsWizard Joined Sun 07/01/07 Posts: 5488	Wed 08/27/08 11:39 PM
AWESOME WRITE......... I appreciate the comment Up

MsWizard Joined Sun 07/01/07 Posts: 5488	Wed 08/27/08 11:39 PM
Amazing, MsWiz Thank you sweet girl, has anybody told you how lovely that new picture is?

myanimalcracker Joined Wed 02/27/08 Posts: 900	Wed 08/27/08 11:48 PM
Amazing, MsWiz Thank you sweet girl, has anybody told you how lovely that new picture is? Thank you, sweets

LAMom Joined Tue 12/12/06 Posts: 26866	Thu 08/28/08 08:57 PM
((( Alicia )))) Hello Lovely one,,, Such Purity within your Eyes

MsWizard Joined Sun 07/01/07 Posts: 5488	Thu 08/28/08 10:56 PM
Amazing, MsWiz Thank you sweet girl, has anybody told you how lovely that new picture is? Thank you, sweets

MsWizard Joined Sun 07/01/07 Posts: 5488	Thu 08/28/08 10:57 PM
((( Alicia )))) Hello Lovely one,,, Such Purity within your Eyes <<----sending love and smooches to her friend ((((DENISE)))

iam4u Joined Fri 10/13/06 Posts: 30096	Fri 08/29/08 02:23 AM
When I look into my looking glass I do not see me. I am invisible with but a vibrent red beating heart. Suspended in mid-air, floating, showing, its alive. Giving all who seek it out, parts to them, to keep. What is to become of its last mortal taste. Feeling all my giving a total waste. To disolve into all that was at-that-time. To reflecting nothing back, not even a rhyme. Good poem Miss Wiz....wink.