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Edited by
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White Roses
White pedal roses, so pure to my inner soul, Gods beauty, to hold WAM 7/10/08 xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx Tranquil Waters Calm tranquil waters, steer me down the path of life, no heart-ache, no strife WAM 7/10/08 xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx Humming Bird Humming bird flutter, with such speed, beauty, and grace, won't hasten her pace. WAM7/10/08 xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx AngelLight AngelLights words shine from pure love deep in her mind perfect rhythm,rhyme WAM 7/10/08 xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx Wolfeyes58 Wolfeye58s childrens stories are so good as her motherhood. WAM 7/10/08 xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx MsWizard MsWizards poems are so sexual to us all, leaves wet, and bulged. WAM 7/10/08 xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx Abracadabra Abracadabra is the best of us all, with words ten feet tall. xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx MsTeddybear Hi MsTeddyBear, your the one who hugs, and cares. Hugs and no dispair. WAM 7/10/08 xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx LurchesSister LurchesSister, your rythmes and words are missed here, bye to you with tears. WAM 7/10/08 xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx LaMom The mom from La. poems to you are just play. Always bright, not grey. WAM 7/10/08 xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx d4tc To d4tc your poems are great to me. Dude please change those sheets. WAM 7/10/08 |
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What nice tributes!!
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What nice tributes!!
 thank you i hope they like them too
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One!
Oh! Oh! Oh! One! One! One! Oh? One? Oh, One Two Three. He writes haiku for you and me. 
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What nice tributes!!
thank you i hope they like them too
They do 
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Housekeeping! 
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Edited by
Takineko
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Thu 07/10/08 09:24 PM
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You really have the right idea, but the Haiku should not be so stressed. Unlike a poem, this is a short matter that reflects this moment, or a singular memory. Relax and write. You will surprise yourself!
Because most Japanese words are polysyllabic, with very short sounds (like the syllables in the three-syllable english word "radio", but unlike the one-syllable words "thought" or "stressed"), the seventeen sounds of a Japanese haiku carry less information than would seventeen syllables. Consequently, writing seventeen syllables in English typically produces a poem that is significantly "longer" than a traditional Japanese haiku. 5-7-5 here is something I will just make up: I found beauty here In a place that I forgot I remember now Doitashimashi te! Mata ne, Steve |
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 Thanks Abra., MsWizard, d4tc i'm glad you all liked them. I hope you all got as much enjoyment out of them as i do yours.  
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Sorry MsWizard should of said "leaves us wet, and bulged" Edit problem hard to get good help around here.
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You really have the right idea, but the Haiku should not be so stressed. Unlike a poem, this is a short matter that reflects this moment, or a singular memory. Relax and write. You will surprise yourself! Because most Japanese words are polysyllabic, with very short sounds (like the syllables in the three-syllable english word "radio", but unlike the one-syllable words "thought" or "stressed"), the seventeen sounds of a Japanese haiku carry less information than would seventeen syllables. Consequently, writing seventeen syllables in English typically produces a poem that is significantly "longer" than a traditional Japanese haiku. 5-7-5 here is something I will just make up: I found beauty here In a place that I forgot I remember now Doitashimashi te! Mata ne, Steve Thanks Takineko, but these are the first and only ones i've written, and i don't consider myself a poet, i like to write stories for young adults, children, and music. Bye the way didn't that famous Japanese Haiku artist write that little ditty? (the woman who is world renown) |
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what nice tributes to our noted poets here.
 
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what nice tributes to our noted poets here.
thank you
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You really have the right idea, but the Haiku should not be so stressed. Unlike a poem, this is a short matter that reflects this moment, or a singular memory. Relax and write. You will surprise yourself! Because most Japanese words are polysyllabic, with very short sounds (like the syllables in the three-syllable english word "radio", but unlike the one-syllable words "thought" or "stressed"), the seventeen sounds of a Japanese haiku carry less information than would seventeen syllables. Consequently, writing seventeen syllables in English typically produces a poem that is significantly "longer" than a traditional Japanese haiku. 5-7-5 here is something I will just make up: I found beauty here In a place that I forgot I remember now Doitashimashi te! Mata ne, Steve I don't believe he's striving for traditional haiku. I believe he's making a first effort. I didn't find his writing forced or stressed. Actually I found it to be quite relaxed as he's apparently quite comfortable with what he wrote and it was reflected in his words... |
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Ty, 1000
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Such a delight to come in and see such loving arms
A heart pure A voice heard Tenderness felt within the words Hugs & Kiss's
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Ah well- what can I say, this deserves a...
((((Hug)))) 
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Great tribute to those in your Haiku'ssssssssssss.........................
 
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Kobayashi Issa? I don't think so. Her simple words are much more structured and provoking. I enjoyed your writings. I hope to see more of yours in the future! :)
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MsWizard, please do not misunderstand, I liked what 10001110123(Did I remember it correctly?) wrote. I agree with you. Any poem anyone writes is special because it reflects an ability and a need to create. I thought my post to 10001110123 would be sent private, I was not trying to 'pee in his Cherrios'. :)
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Tranquil Waters Calm tranquil waters, steer me down the path of life, no heart-ache, no strife WAM 7/10/08 xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx Humming Bird Humming bird flutter, with such speed, beauty, and grace, won't hasten her pace. These two are my favorite. |
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