Topic: tell me what you think
John_Loni's photo
Wed 05/07/08 05:36 PM
Hi all good day!

I have been writing a song and want to know what u people think about it!

it's just a part of it


'when I look in your eyes
I see your soul
shinning so much that
warms my heart'


so what u think? do ya think it needs a little bit of change?

John

MirrorMirror's photo
Wed 05/07/08 05:41 PM
drinker excellentdrinker

Derekkye's photo
Wed 05/07/08 05:42 PM
Edited by Derekkye on Wed 05/07/08 05:45 PM
really sorry guy, but do you have another passion? hope you're not offended

Medic_Ronnie's photo
Wed 05/07/08 05:43 PM

sorry guy, but do you have another passion?

Derek,..reading your posts have made my night,..thanx drinker

no photo
Wed 05/07/08 05:46 PM
:smile: drinker

John_Loni's photo
Wed 05/07/08 05:48 PM
Edited by John_Loni on Wed 05/07/08 05:48 PM

really sorry guy, but do you have another passion? hope you're not offended


yeah, I play drums and cook, don't worry I'm not offended at all!

all commentss are welcome

J.

Derekkye's photo
Wed 05/07/08 05:51 PM
For what it's worth I don't have much talent in anything - including critiquing

LIJOMA's photo
Wed 05/07/08 05:54 PM

Hi all good day!

I have been writing a song and want to know what u people think about it!

it's just a part of it


'when I look in your eyes
I see your soul
shinning so much that
warms my heart'


so what u think? do ya think it needs a little bit of change?

John



Maybe just a lit,:smile: No whatever you feel is perfect!!!flowerforyou

Cinderella75's photo
Wed 05/07/08 05:54 PM
Well it's better than what I could come with right now..
I am suffering from writer's block..

John_Loni's photo
Wed 05/07/08 06:01 PM
thanks for the replys, actually I have been thinking in changing it a little I wasn't very inspired when I wrote this but wanted to know what others think!

Pete026's photo
Wed 05/07/08 06:02 PM

Hi all good day!

I have been writing a song and want to know what u people think about it!

it's just a part of it


'when I look in your eyes
I see your soul
shinning so much that
warms my heart'


so what u think? do ya think it needs a little bit of change?

John


Sounds like a great start. Keep up with it, and ignore the critics. If the lyrics mean something to you, then that's all that matters.

Now you only have to find a rhyme to "heart"

Hmmm....