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If you could see inside my soul,
You'd see a place that's dark and cold, Where angels fear to tread, A place that's grey , And so alone, Where a million tears were shed, A place where all the anger and hate, For what was done has dwelled, This place you would instantly know, Is a little piece of hell, I no longer have that room, It's no longer in my soul, And if you asked me why it was there, It was to remind myself to know, The pain and hurt that I went through, When I was just a kid, Shouldn't come back on you, For something someone else did. |
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Powerful Dane really powerful
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Wow Dane, Very Moving!!
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Thank you poet, I appreciate the kind words.
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Dane,this is very moving and powerful.I can relate.I made damn certain
that the cyle was broken for my three Daughters sake.And if it cost them one less Grandmother than so be it.I'll let you fill in the blanks on the rest.Excellent expression here Dane.Godspeed!Cybear. |
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excellent and very very well said bigbay |
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Dane- that was really from a deep place.
Awesome feelings being relayed there. Great writing!! |
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I needed to tell you from a person who made sure my kids didnt have to
suffer as I did thank you for your words it means a lot |
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Thanks guys,and gals, I'm glad you enjoyed it.Lucky it was written so
well,Sleep deprivation and all. |
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Very good Dane and yes we can change
the cycle of our kids lives so they do not have to endure the things we did as a child. |
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That's very good Dane you put what we were talking about better than
I've ever been able to.A person you look up to,love,and care for to be that selfish and mean can be scarring for life. But we've pulled through TY for the beautiful poem |
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You were also the inspiration for this one SB, not just my little
girl. |
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Very powerful and well written Dane.
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Writing one for you too karma,"Thorfinn's mighty shield"
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Dane!!! didn't know you could write so beautiful!!!
good work!!! |
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well that pretty much summed up my childhood but i too promised to break
the cycle no matter what i loved it thanks |
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awesome dude!! awesome but strong
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