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VFury Joined Tue 01/29/08 Posts: 170	Tue 04/15/08 07:39 AM
Why did I sit silently in the glass-walled mausoleum and the oak-mossed cemetery watching ducks and swans paddle the still pond, resurrecting lives in my imagination? Why did I absorb reality from the headstones of strangers and mourn them for the lessons they would never teach me? Why did they inhabit my place of escape, rest in my solitude, dance in my mind? why did my own family’s grassy grounds never allow me relief, never offer my heart a chance to forgive? I have not been able to care enough to need forgiveness. I fail myself for it. But peace lights soft as early morning feathers in places where lives are summed up in a few carved lines and everyone becomes an epitaph.

David1943 Joined Thu 04/10/08 Posts: 114	Tue 04/15/08 07:41 AM
This is absolutely beautiful, and so very evocative. It brought tears to my eyes.

VFury Joined Tue 01/29/08 Posts: 170	Tue 04/15/08 07:42 AM
Thanks, David. It's my first post here, and I welcome any feedback!

TxsGal3333 Joined Tue 09/05/06 Posts: 76436	Tue 04/15/08 07:43 AM
Very good and welcome to the site

sunny101 Joined Fri 03/28/08 Posts: 73	Tue 04/15/08 07:44 AM
Great !

Wolfeyes58 Joined Tue 09/25/07 Posts: 5114	Tue 04/15/08 07:45 AM
WOW...that was beautiful...so eloquent in your descriptions. Post more.

VFury Joined Tue 01/29/08 Posts: 170	Tue 04/15/08 07:47 AM Edited by VFury on Tue 04/15/08 07:48 AM
Thanks, Wolf. I figured I may as well jump in the mix. Glad to get some feedback from a frequent poster!

Wolfeyes58 Joined Tue 09/25/07 Posts: 5114	Tue 04/15/08 07:50 AM
Thanks, Wolf. I figured I may as well jump in the mix. Glad to get some feedback from a frequent poster! You're quite welcome...I would love to see more and speaking for the others, I'm sure they would too.

CyPoet Joined Fri 01/11/08 Posts: 12494	Tue 04/15/08 07:52 AM
A brilliant write indeed.Very saddening & heart felt.A mortals quest 4 deeper understanding & closure.I would Luv 2 read more.Godspeed!Cy

Differentkindofwench Joined Sat 04/07/07 Posts: 5960	Tue 04/15/08 07:53 AM
Listen to the four legged, he knows of what he speaks. I most definitely like it....... P.S. Ditto on the welcome too.

VFury Joined Tue 01/29/08 Posts: 170	Tue 04/15/08 07:55 AM
Cy, wench and Txs: Thanks so much for your welcome and postivity! I look forward to reading your posts as well. It's great to have a community of fellow poetry lovers!

LAMom Joined Tue 12/12/06 Posts: 26866	Tue 04/15/08 08:27 AM
So much depth within your soul,,, Most awesome write indeed, Welcome to the Poetry Family,, And I do hope this is not the last we see of you,,, Bravo,,,

MsTeddyBear2u Joined Fri 04/06/07 Posts: 22031	Tue 04/15/08 10:59 AM
That was very good! Welcome to the poetry section!

s1owhand Joined Fri 05/18/07 Posts: 29437	Tue 04/15/08 11:03 AM
satan says, "i like that"

jimz Joined Sun 06/24/07 Posts: 2365	Tue 04/15/08 11:10 AM
I like your poetry peace jimmy

VFury Joined Tue 01/29/08 Posts: 170	Tue 04/15/08 11:10 AM
Is there a pew reserved for me in Hell?

VFury Joined Tue 01/29/08 Posts: 170	Tue 04/15/08 11:59 AM
I like your poetry peace jimmy Thanks, Jimmy, I love yours too! I just didn't come up with something clever to post in a timely manner!

7Kate7 Joined Wed 03/05/08 Posts: 195	Tue 04/15/08 04:46 PM
Wow, what a great write! Keep posting.

cmeasiam Joined Fri 06/08/07 Posts: 141	Tue 04/15/08 05:31 PM
Nice write and welcome.