When we are inside everythings ok, but when we go outside, i want you to hide, and go away. i know its about the heart, but i dont want to be seem with you. When i see people i know, i either ignore you, or introduce you as my friend. You dont seem to mind, maybe because im so hot, your just happy to be seen with me. I hate when you say you love me, especially when im horney. I just say ok, then turn you around, and give you a good pound. If you didnt pay my bills, and give me money, i would spend more time with my real honey. Sometimes i wish you didnt take my calls, or open the door, because all im going to do is treat like my little whore. One day you will wake up, and realize your being used, just not before you buy me those new shoes. i only touch you for a little a$$,then roll over, and ask for cash, then dash. Well my pathetic friend its time for me to go, until next time, i ring you to open the door.

Not bad... it would read better tho, if you spaced it out...
or, you might get more responses that way.
The subject matter never shy's me away,
but easy reading ability is nice.
Good write overall. Told well from the right perspective.

your right, but i guess you can tell it comes right out of my head. thanks

lot of feeling behind it..........flows well have to admitt i read it and thought your a prick...............LOL that's a good thing though poetry should make the reader"feel" all in all i say it is a really good piece.

thank you