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I actually wrote this one night and well. I thought it turned out, pretty good. Tell me what you think
I walked a path in which I should have never took A path ethced in my heart, like a writers book Around a corner, there I saw and gazed The key to my only happiness, in a large stone maze As I entered the maze, with fear and pain within I realized that I could not turn back herein Surrounded by darkness, despair and sorrow You gave me the strength, that you let me borrow As I approached the middle of the maze at I was engulfed in the darkness, I could not gaze at Swirling, drifting, not knowing where to go I was struck, and blinded with a thunderous blow As I buried my face, surrounded by the dark night You came in like an angel with your radiant light As I stood up and raised my head up high, I began to admire your beauty, as I cry There we stood, in a distance between us I knew I couldn't be with you, my heart turned to dust To this day, I admire you from near and far I looked up towards the sky, wishing upon a star I hoped that one day I would be with you To show you how much I truly love you Please tell me what you think. I really would love the feedback |
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very nice n sweet...nice work
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very nice n sweet...nice work Thank you very much miss, I appreciate the kindness :) |
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Great stuff Jason..
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Great stuff Jason.. Thanks for the comment, I appreciate it much |
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